Pity this was abandoned. It’s interesting enough to keep reading and new harry barely manages to redeem himself to not be a full on jerk. Ah well that’ll teach me to start reading a story without checking that it’s completed before I start.

I have to say I’m growing quite disappointed with this version of harry you created. There’s nothing left of the real harry and , far worse, the new one is an arrogant moody prick that’s stupidly stubborn to boot. You know that if your audience can’t relate at all with your prick .. err main character, they won’t give a damn about your story?

I’ll read one more chapter to better see where you are going with this but ...

I like your story. But I feel (a little) disappointed that you didn’t elaborate on Minerva reporting the Dursleys to the magical child services for abuse, and that Bumblingdore will have the option of forcing harry back to the Dursleys.

I also think it would have been great to elaborate on harry living in the Wizarding world, meeting people there, possibly making friends or acquaintances.

Still, looking forward to reading more.

I’m really enjoying this story quite a bit. So far it’s logical and well written. I wonder which way you’ll take it? Looking forward to reading more.

Good. Dying to see why the change.

Thanks for sharing a great story. Very different perspective on Harry. Mice to see him struggle with growing up and Diary expectations. If you ever get back to writing story I will read it.

Take Care

Chapter was fascinating for Harry’s development. The older Harry finally had chance to pound him a bit.

Great way to handle Malfoy. Better for Gryffindor that he chose House. Otherwise the idiots would get slaughtered.

Interesting. I thought the first visit back would be lesson on compassion. This Harry is far too judgmental. But it’s common in abuse victims. Find a way to reject them before they reject you

Terrific chapter.

Making money off of transactions may explain another reason why society remains stagnant. It’s their only opportunity to make money

Love your Minerva and the changes to plot. It makes much sense an actual adult would take.

Your Harry is cold. I hope he softens up

I love the approach because this Harry really thought it through. Looking forward to what you do with story.

Just in case you ever decide to start writing again, which I believe you should do if you can, I just wanted to give you a few pointers.
Overuse of the word hence is very irritating. While I commend your use of a word that is no longer in active use, the fact is that it is no longer in active use, so it kind of sticks out like an unsightly blemish everytime you see it. It's kind of like using 'for' as a coordinating conjunction; yes it works, but it looks and sounds wrong.
Speaking of wrong. 'Bruv' Let me count the ways.
Ignoring for the moment that Harry would never use this word, even if he was actually talking to his brother, the word itself started as American slang in the 70's and 80's and has only recently been assimilated by some of the currant English youth of today and largely only those refered to as Chavs. From what I gather, a Chav is an anti-social lower-class youth who dresses in sportswear, idolizes American rap "gangstas" and who makes absolutely no sense to anyone excepting other Chavs. Personally, I think it's a mutation of a cockney dialect.
You need to take into account what and how different people say things. Which, on the whole, you're not too bad at. Just remember to watch your slang. There are more than 37 different dialects in the British isles at last count, and they don't all use the same slang.
One last thing. An editor, or beta as they are called here, is not a bad thing. They are necessary tools that are often overlooked and or disregarded. Using one does not make you less of a writer.
Hope to see you back here in the future.
Cheers.

Keep updating your book as it is quite interesting. You have held my attention throughout the book and I would love to read more of your book.

Although I don't know if Harry (you) considered this but him being in Griffindor means that Dumbledore won't think to look at Harry to closely than if he went into the Eagles or the Snakes

I thought you'd a gift for writing. Because of you, I went to your inkitt page but the stories aren't updated there either.

Ty for sharing the filler parts on the banking system!