Seriously, you had a good story until you had Spock attack Kirk and beat on him...then you lost me. Why did you have to take the story away from Spock and toss it to Kirk?

Really great so far! I like the whole idea of the story, good job :)

I'm loving it gud story

Good, I can't wait to read the next chapter. I hope Jim not dying.

Interesting. Look forward to another chapter.