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Genial bh

Great job with your contribution to the Resetverse. I liked reading this pseudo-sequel to one of my favorite episodes of Pokémon Generations (awesome web series, despite the short length) and I really appreciate the closure to an episode that gave an ambiguous and likely gruesome ending.

Since this is the Resetverse, it's no surprise that the stakes are higher when dealing with wild Pokémon. Unlike the canon universe where nearly every wild Pokémon was ultimately good or misunderstood or, at worst, a mild nuisance, the Pokémon here are potentially bloodthirsty and malevolent, far more willing to kill people or Pokémon for the sake of violence or warped amusement. I also appreciate you using an out-of-the-way location from Sinnoh, one of my favorite regions.

You certainly did justice to Gardenia's character, showing she truly earned her Gym Leader credentials by helping someone in need and holding her own against evil spirits from the great beyond. I honestly don't remember much about Sho (the one-shot character here) except where his Raichu blasted Pikachu point-blank with Hyper Beam. Still, good to see Sho was willing to help when the chips were down, even if he would deny his inner goodwill. #overkilltsundere

Besides, I think if you used someone like Barry in this one-shot, he would've clashed too much with the darker atmosphere of the story. He'd be better suited for a more light-hearted moment in time.

The skeleton remains of the previous trainer certainly added some weight to the situation. Evil spirits don't discriminate towards victims. I'm glad the Rotom-Dex survived his daring plan, but it seemed a little idealistic that he made it. He's likely been struggling to survive on his own for years and he could've expended lots of energy to stay hidden from the spirits in the Chateau. I would have liked to know how Rotom managed to survive for so long and what would count as food for him.

Truthfully, I wouldn't exactly describe this as a Mystery story since it didn't seem like there was much of a mystery to solve. Suspense seems more fitting for this story. Still, it was a good story that offered some good thrills.

I'm really glad with the characters you chose for this story. Usually, Cynthia and Paul are among the few Sinnoh characters who hog the spotlight in most fanfictions. I applaud you for using lesser known individuals and giving them time to shine. Especially since you included one of the five Stat Trainers - Cheryl - albeit in a state of distress for the majority of the story. Still, you managed to capture Cheryl's canon character quite well and gave her a little more depth near the end.

I do think you went a little over-the-top on the ghosts reactions to being dragged back into their realm. All the lines used seemed kind of cliché.

A few questions:

1. Do you think there was some kind of hidden treasure in the Old Chateau? If so, what do you think it would be? If there was a treasure, I bet Cheryl might feel a little disappointment at not finding it, though it definitely wouldn't be worth risking her life for that (and I doubt she'd ever want to visit that derelict building again).

2. Would other spirits be able to form an anchor at that Chateau in the future? Or would they use other locations in other regions to achieve a similar effect?

3. What was your favorite episode(s) of Pokémon Generations and why? I'm guessing this sequel means that you liked the Old Chateau episode, but I want to hear your thoughts on the matter.

4. What Sinnoh characters are your favorite and deserved more screen-time?

Overall, this was an enjoyable read. You certainly put a lot of effort into something out of your field of expertise and I thought it worked well. Keep up the good work.

I want to play. Will you play with me? ...forever?
-BrightNova169

No me esperaba que este fanfic fuese una continuación de ese episodio de Pokemon Generations.

La verdad, pensaba que iba a tener que estar comprobando Bulbapedia cada dos por tres si queria enterarme de algo, (como me paso cuando lei el interludio de Clemont) pero por suerte solo tuve que mirarla una vez.

El fanfic ha estado bastante bien. Lograste capturar esa sensación de horror que dicho episodio tenia. Y puntos para Gardenia por tener suficientes neuronas como para saber que nunca hay que separarse en ese tipo de situaciones. Una pena que al final fueron separados por la fuerza.

En fin, una historia entretenida. Si mas historias de generaciones que no conozco son asi, tendria menos reparo en leerlas (Excepto las de Alola. No entiendo absolutamente NADA de las historias de Alola. Demasiadas cosas nuevas)

I apologize for taking so long to review, I've been way more busy than I hoped, but I'm glad to have finished it: I did like this quite adventurous tale, and enjoyed the roles and dynamic you crafted with Gardenia and Sho (and you played off the fact that Sho lacks an Alolan Raichu even if he now has supposedly the whole Pikachu evolutionary line in a quite amusing way), and I think you introduced and dealt with Rotom pretty well and it works as a pseudo-sequel to Generations' episode 10. All in all, it was definitely a fun Interlude and one I'm glad to have read.

That said, and please don't take this the wrong way, there were several things that added up and didn't make this Interlude as great as it could've been in my opinion: aside from some stuff I already told you about in the past like how you tend to write a lot of redundant statements ('nodding in agreement' is a small, easy example since nodding already implies agreement, but also most of your parenthesis end up saying superfluous information), I feel like this Interlude suffered a bit from being translated in english after being written in spanish, given there's several typos (Gardenia is adressed as a 'he' at one point, for example) and odd sentence structures, alongside a host of other problems, one of them being that while the story was definitely spooky, I didn't feel it was really as scary as you wanted it to be. One of the keys in writing horror in my opinion is pacing the scenes well depending on what you want to convey, alongside using evocative and strong descriptions: you don't usually pace the descriptive parts well since you tend to write all description not broken by dialogue in 'one chunk', which slows down the pacing considerably even when things should be happening fast (the more white space there is, the more the scene reads fast and is perceived as fast), and you rely a bit too much on 'standard', almost generic description over trying to be evocative (you boil down the little girl's nightmare face to 'demonic face', when you could've gone for something like 'crimson blood eyes pierced through Sho, a fanged smile splitting her pale face in two as she giggled', just for one example). You also semi-contradict yourself towards the end about Cheryl, with everyone pretty sure she entered the Chateau to find the treasure only for Gardenia to ask Cheryl why she was in the Chateau in spite of being already sure and for Cheryl to say she was lost and took shelter as per the Generations episode, only for Cheryl to think later that it was due to her interest in treasures that Sho and Gardenia had their misadventure, and related to this is a bit of a shame that you didn't delve on the treasure, and it would've been cool if you could've delved into it (maybe the stone being said treasure, for one, or delving on where the ghosts came from). I also think you abused a bit too much the word 'creepy' and 'creepily', which blunted the impact of some of the scenes (just describing the butler as nice without caveats would've made him incredibly scary in this context and made clear he felt 'wrong'). Lastly, and very minorly, I'm not sure if Gardenia was sarcastic or not with her comment on Rotom's capture being moving considering how she's in 'let's get out of there' mode at that moment.

Please don't take this too personally, I apologize if I was too harsh but I did like what you wrote and just feel it's a shame that it could've been even better if not for those little things adding up, but of course the important thing is that you are happy of how the story turned out. Great work in any case, and I look forward for your next stories, be they Resetverse-based or not!

I liked the story, but I want to complain that I don't really like that you gave this an anime treatment. The anime and generations are two different universes, Pokémon don't say their names in generations, and Sho is an anime exclusive character, so I don't consider this a sequel to the old chateau if it takes place in the anime and not generations. Sorry if I sound a prick, I like the story, would have enjoyed more if it wasn't like the anime.

I like this story.

I cry for Rotom's trainer. I'm happy he found someone. I like that episode of Pokemon Generations.

Sho is one of my favorite COD.

P.S. : Please do not take this the wrong way but you misspelled the character name. It is Sho not Shou.

Very good, and a good semi-continuation of Pokemon Generations.

I also liked that you gave three Sinnoh characters the spotlight (the gym leaders and game characters from Sinnoh are kinda underused, with the exception of Argenta and Cynthia)

Spooky. I liked it. Maybe you could write a Halloween Special in October?

I enjoyed the story, though I found a few errors.

-She'd love to take care of that, were not for the ghosts lurking around.-
The sentence is missing "it" between "were" and "not".

-Now, what as for Cheryl, you hold her by the armpits, I'll grab her ankles.-
Two things with this. One, the "what" is unnecessary. Two, the closing quotation mark is missing.

Also, I checked the bulbapedia page on Shou. According to them, his name is spelled Sho.