I really like Yami Naruto just being an overall shit head to everyone. His view on the lives of others as mere tools make me wonder what his plans are. I understand his drive to be while but how will he accomplish this, really excited to find out.

We know you're busy rewriting the She-Ra story, but maybe in the future, if not too much work or hassle, a little update to "A charming jester." If not possible, no problem.
Take care.
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same scene plus your naruto can make it a totally different one. also, giving ezra some kind of fetish that only naruto will know about could be interesting too

great chapter. blowing his cover was a much needed change. so far everything is great though it's better to say it's not yami naruto but all emotions of naruto combined

ok i'm done, Yami is meant to be ALL of Naruto's Negative Emotions and you have him all polite and shit to a guy trying to KILL him, just no this is not a Yami Naruto story this is some O.C bullshit where you've got 2 Naruto's 1 without any emotions but somehow still a good person, and 1 with emotions who is EXACTLY as laid back about people doing shit to him as Canon Naruto, i get you're basing him off a character from another Anime/Cartoon but really it ruins him because at no point do i see ANY of Yami in this character, i'm honestly not trying to flame, if you just had Naruto split then i'd be fine but you have Yami in the tags and he's not Yami Yami would have fucking destroyed shadow man the SECOND he showed hostility to him, and would have fucing murdered Natsu who is so like Canon Naruto that it's almost copyright infringement

i hate literally everything you just said about J,B.A tat kind of character is disgusting to me I am a very petty and vinictive person

but she is SO FUCKING CUTE! honestly she's adorable

I wonder when they are going to become one again and who’s body is gonna take over who. I really hope Yami Naruto doesn’t hurt or backstab the people that generally love him or care for him like Juvia Wendy Ezra and Mira. I also like how your deviating from the cannon and changing major things like this chapter with Minerva. Also I wonder if she is going to be part of the harem when she is older.

Please for the love of god update your Naruto loud house fanfic. It is a great story and I am dying to see what happens next.

I like the story man. I really am. I like how Naruto got split in two between his Yami side and the other. But I feel like with the Naruto in both Edolas and Yami, I haven't really seen where did the OG personality went to. Is it dead or went to the other way or something else. And I hope that will get answered later on.

And man I know you want to make Yami Naruto with some Yoshikage traits going on here, but too much of it makes it looks like he is some kind of a neckbeard. I mean the whole tip my fedora habit, smiling with one eye closed and that m'lady personality is some pretty neckbeardy-y ass shit. I'm not saying that it's a bad choice to make Naruto into some kind of a gentleman, but don't overdo it too much that it's kinda creepy to read. Maybe you could use let say Daniel Craig's James Bond as a pretty good example of how a gentleman will he interact with other people. I think he will be a pretty good example in how to use his wit in conversation.

Keep up with the good work man, I'll be waiting for the next one

Thankyou

While you're right about Kyouka being sensual she was BRUTALLY torturing Erza. The whole thing about making her sense of pain a thousand fold greater and then whipping her migh seem sensual on the surface but if you think about it from Erza's prespective it was outrighe horrific torture. I don't think any masochist would have liked to feel so much pain they loose all other sense of perception, that's what I imagine to be a bit of what Erza experienced. I don't think even remotely foldly of a sadist that believes everyone that isn't a demon should only know absolute suffering. Though she's gotten love in other fics and you can write her as you please, heck how often is there an Akame Ga Kill fic with Esdeath as the pairing? Most aren't familiar with the manga but Esdeath was fine with her men raping and humiliating people and dind't have reservations about supporting nobles who'd have children raped by animals for entertainment. Sadism isn't something you're likely to find attractive if you come across it in real life if if the person who it's attributed to is attractive but that thought of kinky girl on girl is obviously appealing.

Finally after a very long time...

Great work keep it up. It has been awhile but I am just glad to see this story updated.

Good chapter and I can’t wait to see what happens next and what naruto will do to Kyouka if she does anything to erza