*major double thumbs up*

It's cute! darn all this dramatic irony.

Lol. See, now this was much better written. Nice plot, nice dialogue, a dash of excitement and humor to round out a well thought out story. Congratulations! And the romance was gently played as it had a an almost subtle feel to it, that's a good thing and frankly is kind of rare. Even though it's obvious the romance is the main topic it's not completely over the top. This was definitely more enjoyable than the other one. This one was a fun read and hopefully your other ones will be as well. Until next time.

I love it so far keep up the good work my dude.

Shhhhhiiiiiiiiiiiiittt . . . . . . I don't know what to think . . . . . like on one hand there's so much fluff and it was amazing but then there's a character that seemed like she could have been a major supporting role that just died, and I mean nice chapter and all, but just . . . well shit (not the chapter is shit, cause its not its amazing, just 'shit'). Luna seemed nice, like she didn't deserve to die, but I guess that that's the character that always gets killed off*coughcoughpyrrhacoughcough*? And also Yang never got to fully apologize to her (while sober at least), and I realized I'm rambling again, but wow was that an abrupt cliffhanger like main character hanging on to the cliff with one hand and antagonist standing over them menacingly and screen cuts to black and the words 'to be continued' fade in and out in the center of the screen type of cliffhanger(AKA an actual cliffhanger). I can just see the shocked look on ruby's face as a corded phone slips out of her hand and clatters to the floor. The camera would slowly pan out showing more of the room she's in while ominous music(like an eerie violin tremolo) is playing and then the credits start rolling(with the tremolo stopping abruptly with an almost tinny sounding, deep drum beat) signalling the end of the episode. Alright, I guess she wasn't a part of the story for that long, so it didn't really need to be that ominous or dramatic, but why not amirite?

SO:
"...thoughts?" you asked.
"...thoughts." I reply.

My thoughts were what you said: 'So that was a thing'

fuck . . . that was . . . jesus, all i can think of to say is oof.

Loved this story. But what happened to loyalty? Thought it just wasn't being updated but it was deleted?

Good story.

Good chapter.

Ah Death, you cockblocker extraordinaire.

Good chapter.

...It's strange seeing the words "You hug too hard" after seeing the latest episode...

Still I agree with the high five breaking hands xD

ahh mierda! esto es tan dulce, lindo , por un momento pensé que eran sentimientos no correspondidos o.o pero no, soy inmensamente feliz, que lindas ajaja esa weiss es una pervertida en secreto no me esperaba eso..bueno tal vez sí , es parte de su encanto(?) esperar lo inesperado...
yang y blake también me gusta que hayan ido a paso lento pero seguro ;3 son tan lindas, me da diabetes!
Muchas gracias todo me ha encantado! arigato!

I've burned through this and The Foxtrot over the last few days while at work and I have to say I love your writing and the way you craft stories. The way you make the characters so multi-faceted and complex adds to their realism in so many ways. You write worlds that are easy to immerse the reader in, and this lends to a very enjoyable reading experience.

I look forward to reading your other RWBY works, and eagerly await any future projects.

- speed killz