Pleas oh please get a beta, the grammar is just no. I love the plot, it:s just that the grammar is throwing me off

You and E.D.I are the same you both come up with horrible jokes

I wanted to see ainz actually do something not just get his input every few chapters I really hope we see him get directly involved first

You know this is the 3rd story that I've read from this author and I'm starting to notice a pattern here. They really dont have a habit of finishing stories do they? Like jeez man. It's been 2 years and still no update? But since I'm still new here I dont know if this is normal or not. Either way I really REALLY hope these stories arent dropped. All of the ones I've read so far are amazing and I really dont want this to end. So if the author ever reads this review mind giving me an answer?

Thank you for the story and the prologue! Helps people that hadn’t play Mass Effect understand what’s happening like me. Thank you Sir Oblivion for this story! Can you possibly make some kind of chapter that talks about the planets, ships, the people, etc of the SK? It makes me more you know connected to the SK and just because I wanna know like different planets on their world and like especial kind of ships like the SK- Prophet. Thank you again!

ahh id wondered why people had started "re-doing" this story.. this chapter makes it obvious! Your sharp turn from a real writing effort into parody and ridiculousness means your bored and the story is headed further into oblivion with each further chapter! I thought it was strange for a dozen different authors to suggest reading up until chapter 3 and not beyond! Lmao And I can see why they all chose to rewrite those first 3 chapters instead of having to put in the massive effort of editing all your missed words and chopped up sentences! English is most certainty not your thing!

When will overlord effect resume?

The group easy ruins the story for me one cerbuse is enough

Hop to read the next chapter of the death game

I liked Esdeath's character a lot more before you threw in all those personality defects. The fourth wall break adds nothing to the story and ruins the immersion, and she's way too much of a loose cannon to fit in with the rest of the story. If word about that one meeting with Shepard's group gets out, the image of the Sorcerous Kingdom will be ruined. That terrible briefing and that crass sexual harassment are not a good look. Either her mind has deteriorated over the centuries and she doesn't realize the problems she's causing, or she has zero respect for Ainz's plan and only cares about the consequences of her actions when they inconvenience her personally.

ha, turns out tanya was in a crossover before quartet even happened!

1 chapter in and I’ve found a couple things to critique.

1) The prologue is way too long. Most of it is just a rehash of basically ME1. Humanity-err, Ainz unites the planets, Ainz creates space travel, Ainz gets advanced tech, Ainz finds Eezo, Ainz finds Mass relay. There is way too much writing to justify these 5 bullet points that nearly every whose ever played Mass Effect already know about.

2) Knowledge of the game before going into the actual game sucks. I get that Momonga was a nerd and played video games, but I find protagonists that know the plot to a universe they are in to be annoying. This can only be fixed by the effect of the MC’s choices drastically changing the plot.

I’ll read a bit more into it but I doubt things will change.

The geth are cool.

Buen trabajo hasta ahora.
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Good job so far.

Interesting