Hullo xD

Moe is a right nerd and I actually enjoy him in this, so I don’t mind opening the chapter with him even though I’d rather like to see Rose’s patronus. That aside, I like that we’re now switching back to the other team and will likely link up with both squads soon – this will sort of fill in the blanks of what these two were up to whilst Curse was bantering and reliving childhood trauma about blood maledictions. Wait! Does Larry also have a blood malediction? Or is he just a straight-up half lycanthrope?

Also, good on Larry – you don’t duel with magic swords, kids, because bad things will happen once the enchantments activate. I do like that the Stooges have a sort of We’ll be BFFs forever sort of deal going on where they even pick their school subjects with a reliance on each other, and I see they’ve stumbled upon the Infinity Gauntlet as well! It’ll take a bit to find it, but I’m sure they’ll get to the stones eventually. I also like that Excalibur exists here, and that it’s apparently just sitting in the museum rather than in a stone somewhere. Also, I like that magical terrorist crew is called the Cloaks – sounds a bit nefarious whilst also being something a bunch of teenagers would come up with.

Sword-Duelling should have never gone out of fashion, in my opinion.

Oooh, Lawrence backstory! I liked that he’d dreamed of being a mage-knight and rescuing the ladies – who would no doubt reward him appropriately – and I think we need a medieval!AU next, clearly. It also touches more on his love for reading, which is really nice given he’s a Ravenclaw, and then we get to the main attraction. We get to learn more about lycanthropes! And Larry! Who is totally not really a werewolf, but is clearly the son of one. I was right in my predictions all story! The Beast Curse has been translated to the Werewolf Curse here, and it is clear that Adam is trying to be a Remus and push people away, but Belle is not having it. She’s a talented witch, and I’m sure she can handle a werewolf if need be. I’m assuming Adam forgot his Wolfsbane potion that night?

So… nobody’s heard about Teddy Lupin, have they? You’d think Remus would be somewhat famous given what happened with the war and all that. Anyway, Adam is a but mean here, but you can understand where he’s coming from as well since these are pretty much the same thoughts that Remus had, and especially after such a trauma as nearly killing his wife and son, everything is just coming out without a filter.

So Larry punches Moe in the face, as one does when having panic attacks, and then he rushes off into the darkness because he’s afraid he’s about to shift and kill everyone.

Right, we jump back to Curse, and they immediately find a terrified Larry. Larry is really panicked at this point, so he’s running from Curse, but Curly won’t have it and decides to tackle him. The boys wrestle for a bit until Rose remembers she’s a witch – but let’s be real, Larry is proving himself to be a physical force of nature by beating up his friends like that. Larry, for his part, seems level-headed now that he’s all bound (haha, found his kink) but Curly is very helpfully reminding him that it is the middle of the day, there is no full moon in sight, and that he isn’t about to maul anyone. One would think that Larry would know this given he’s the brains of the group, but I suppose this is just a topic that gets him irrational.

Anyway, the group finds a talking Dementor… okay, I don’t remember them talking in canon but I’ll run with it, and Curly is right – they need to get away from the dementor, because somehow, he’s got friends that are a Maledictus and a Werewolf, so of course a dementor is wrecking them given the nature of their fears. I wonder what Moe is afraid off? Flying Monkeys? Ok, so we get Rose’s swan and Curly’s golden retriever – and I think it’s really rude of you to not show us what patronus Larry has, though I’m going to imagine it’s a wolf – but what’s this? The Dementors have some strange purple gems that eat patroni! Rude! Anyways, Moe puts on the Infinity Gauntlet and rushes in to save the day! He beats up the Dementor just as it’s about to kiss Larry (And you know what, this just proves Larry is the studliest stud to ever stud, because he can even get amortal beings to want to snog him)

Ok, and then the Big Bad Wolf shows up to save the day – and everyone is chilling at the Ministry. Harry shows up to make Curly fangasm, and then Rogers swoops in to rescue his ladyship. Anyway, Siggy is going to hear about this and there’ll be trouble unless Rose can convince him to keep it quiet, and then we have Curse hugging each other. Of course, they now tell their theory to the Ministry, so Harry has a lead to go on.

What I hope happens next: We get more about Lycan Larry and more about Maledictus Rose, and we find out what Moe has going on, and finally, we get to figure out what’s up with Curly, because he probably has a vampire great-grandmother or something at this point. Anyway, will I get thumped if I end this with an update soon?

Hullo xD

I have returned, and I must say that it is very mean for you to drop me right into a Siggy scene – I demand recompense for that, because I cannot stand the odious man and all that he represents, and I really think the story could use with Rose suffering the loss of her father. Suffering is a strong word given whom her father actually is, but I suppose she could get a bit maudlin about it and actually care for the pathetic wretch. This scene, however, also has her moping about not taking the chance to embrace Curly, which is definitely something to mope about, and I once again blame Siggy for raising his daughter in such a way that she’s so… *insert various adjectives, most of which are not complimentary*

On the other hand, I need to compliment you on your writing of Siggy – He is completely and utterly insufferable. It’s actually a miracle that Rose turned out as functional as she has. Grandpa Will, on the other hand, remains a delight – someone needs to tell Siggy how useless he is, and it’s clear that Odette is rather useless at that. She must be a rather dim woman, in my opinion, because most intelligent women would have left by this point. Love can only go so far… or maybe she has a fetish for insufferable people. I suppose that could work as well, given that Siggy seems the type to discuss statistics whilst trying for Rose.

We do get the confirmation that Odette is likely a Queenie type, but let’s just hope she doesn’t awkwardly join a hookah-smoking weirdo who vapes World War 2.

God, Siggy is making me want to stop reading, so I’m just refraining from discussing him in general for the remainder of the review.

On the other hand, I quite like Grandpa Will and Rogers being old-people friends. Old-people friends are the best, because they constantly bicker about whose actually older, and it just makes them seem much nicer as people. Frankly, it also makes Will seem much better as a person since I can’t quite imagine He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named playing games with Rogers. Speaking of Rogers, he amuses me, and I quite like that the cat gives nose boops.

Rogers continues to amuse me with his formality and his monocle, and I imagine a top-hat and cane that matches the rest of his ensemble as well. I like Rogers and demand that we have more of him and less of Mister Awful Father, and look, Stooge/Rose bonding! Larry has set his shoes on fire, because that seems appropriate, and Curly is bonding with AlterNick… This is good, given that in TSP, AlterNick is a bit of an asshole.

Zazu! I approve of this cameo. Zazu is definitely a breath of fresh air, even if he is rather stuffy – I like the note about youthful charges, and I imagine he’s referring to Kovu and Kiara’s kids? Somehow, I suspect that any children of that lot will be Gryffindors or the sake of poetry alone. Regardless, Rogers and Zazu also seem to be old-people friends, and god bless Rogers for being so good at trying to make Rose happy. Anyway, locking the foursome in is a recipe for disaster, but Larry uses his deep vaults to bribe their way in, so that’s sorted. And I see a Sebastian mention, which FAIR, have you met Aquaria and Caspian? They kept the old crab really busy when they were kids, but I’m getting off topic.

Of course, we get into the real reason the Stooges and Rose have decided to come to this museum, which is of course their quest to deal with the magical muggle terrorists currently trying to destroy the world. I do like the brief mentions of some of the exhibits – magical weapons sounds really neat, and I’m wondering about just what weapons are in there. I also quite like that you touched on the witch hunts – I remember something about them from canon, actually. Didn’t the witches use flame-freezing charms to get burned dozens of times just for laughs? POA canon, I think. On the bright side, Curse gets to explore the witch hunts together, and I think they’re going to get frisky.

We get some nice Curse banter, and voila, the secret is finally revealed. Like Nagini and Astoria, Rose suffers from a Blood Malediction. It seems that it’s running more similarly to what Nagini’s version which manifested in an animal-transformation whereas Astoria apparently withered away and died, so I suppose we should be grateful for small blessings. Anyway, there’s a set number based on how many times Rose can transform before being cursed to an eternity of swanhood, BUT, clearly Odile has managed to survive the malediction thanks to Siggy. Therefore, it is important that Curse kiss – though, I do wonder if True Love’s Kiss will work in an HP-verse given it’s more of a Fairy-Tale lore, but then again, HP is known for love being the greatest of magic. I suppose this explains why Siggy sucks so much, but it’s really not an excuse. Will is right. To live doesn’t mean you’re alive.

Also, there is a dementor in the museum… Granted, this is unsettling given that after TDH, the Dementors disappeared without a trace, so where this one came from… I suspect Odile, but that’s only because I always suspect her. Oooh, cliffhanger ending, but I suppose we’re going to see some patroni next. Without further ado, let’s jump right onwards to Larry being mentally scarred!

Very good story - sure kept me glued to the screen for days!

Wait, can Rose eat eggs? She's vegetarian, not vegan, right? Eh. She didn't finish it anyway. (Bad Rose! Finish your breakfast! It's the most important meal of the day!)

*giggles* Have I mentioned that you write Curly very well? Excellently in fact. I love Teddy chasing him around on the broom and the fact that Larry and Teddy use transfiguration against Curly so much Rose has no problem casting Reparifarge. It's just so... them.

I like the way you write Moe, too. The shift from his stuttering blush to the way he calmly rattles off the grenade's specs is very true to form.

As is Curly's shouting. XD Rose's confusion is so cute. Makes me snicker. It's fun to see a pureblood not getting Muggle things. Love the Marvel reference.

Oh, typo. Larry is thinking he should have listened to Rose and you've got "staid" instead of "stayed".

I love Larry and plants. Even if he can't control them in MiB the way he can in TSP, there's something satisfying about the two together.

I'm having a moment where I'm trying to think back to HP, because Larry is just thinking of the profs by their last names and I'm like "isn't there supposed to be a professor in there somewhere", but I think it happens in HP too, so no rule for it? Eh.

I love how this shift of perspective leads to another clue. Like at first it just seems to be a side quest of Larry's, but it quickly is tied back into the main plot. Just nice. Two clues in one chapter, and our heroes trying to put things together!

*cackles* I always loved the way you ended this chapter. Just so much fun to have Larry make such a statement and the others' complete shock over it. Nice cliffhanger. Or at least fun for me, since I know how things will be going.

One of your best strong suits for this story has been in the way you are able to set and describe a scene. Throughout that entire incident with the Venus flytrap, I could easily picture everything that was happening. I also think that in that vein of descriptions and visuals, you still manage to capture the essence of Rowling’s tone and how the world of Hogwarts feels. That is sometime something I find to be a hard balancing act: creating improvements on the canon while still keeping to the aspects one does like about the canon. It’s especially tricky because you’re still trying to appeal to readers, who were fans of the canon, and thus, they have certain expectations for what they want to see. I think you handle all of that well.

I’m finding it hard to have anything to criticize to make this the sandwich review I promised. However, if there’s one thing I’m a little on the fence about is some of the names of the characters. I mean, I get it, Larry, Moe, Curly (hahaha). On the one hand, it fits to a certain extent because these three characters are very good at finding trouble and mayhem to get into. Rose, adds to it too, but I think she’s there to be somewhat of a voice of reason, at least one that the boys will listen to more than Larry. On the other hand, though, it feels a little campy. Given all the seriousness within the story, finding this just feels…odd. I don’t know how best to put it, and honestly, I could live with it either way. But, that’s just the only nitpick I can really think of.

Finally, I said it somewhat in the last review I gave you, but I’ll say it again. I think you’ve been really amazing at looking at the modern muggle world in comparison with the wizarding world, something Rowling always kind of lacked in. We live in a current age of terrorists and the debate about weapons and their possession. These are things which I think would spill over into the wizarding world at some point. It’s not like the wizarding world is its own personal bubble shut off from the rest of the world. True, they have protections to avoid being seen, but once out of school, witches and wizards have to adapt to the muggle world or just go off the grid. How would the wizarding world handle modern issues of politics? I think those are the kinds of things you’re raising in this. Furthermore, the fact that you’re having these characters reference the wizarding world in other countries is a huge step. I mean, Rowling’s only dabbling in it now. The wizarding world is so much bigger than just England, and that’s something unique to this story that I think is important.

Best,
Zad

Greetings it's Theodore Hawkwood from Reverse Tag once again.

Again I'll apologize for my lack of familiarity with the Harry Potter franchise.

I find the first line of this chapter a sad commentary on the state of affairs for our world as well as the Harry Potter universe. Far too many regard history as dull, whilst failing to see its impacts on current and future events. I see you've chosen to at least attempt to follow that theme in this fanfic.

I do find it rather fascinating you've chosen to expound on that theme with the nature of Professor Binns being a ghost and the fact that he seems to be a quite the dry, almost Ben Stein reminiscent, lecturer.

With the fact that it is nearly a cliche that lessons from history come to bite us in the butt at the most inopportune time, I get the scary feeling that whatever Professor Binns speaks of is going to rear its ugly head in the immediate future. If this is indeed the case I fear for our main cast before I even get started.

It is nearly a Television trope that Moe and Rose communicate via passing notes, but with the parchment that functions in what appears to be text message sort of ways, it's like a Wizarding World equivalent to the same. I had to crack a smile at your take of the Wizarding World's version of passing notes or sneaking text messages at school, an oh-so-1990s era phenomenon that brings back some old memories. Thanks for hitting the nostalgia feels for me there.

I found still further characterization for Moe when they discuss the notion of shielding the signature of a laptop computer, that oh-so-ever-present piece of Muggle technology, from various 'magical eyes' at Hogwarts to be quite revealing for the character.

I found there was a slight inaccuracy in the bit where Larry describes reading Ernest Hemingway's classic A Farewell to Arms. It did not take place in World War II, it took place in World War I. I know you were using discussion of the book to detail Larry and Professor Smith's discussion on warfare and Muggle technology to indirectly query mysterious events of previous chapters, but that inaccuracy threw me right out of the story. I would recommend fixing it.

I find the bit about Professor Smith's vampiric past/nature after the American Civil War to be fascinating. I just wonder what books he prescribed for Larry to further his education on Muggle military technology. I suppose I shall have to look further.

Great Read thus far,

Theodore Hawkwood

I have a slight nitpick about the first line (because I am terrible). "on the words" seems off. Maybe "on her book" would be better? Or just dropping the phrase. Feels clunky to me.

Otherwise, yay Fitz! And Larry, and the power of friendship! XD I like how you introduce Curly's character through Fitz.

I love the tidbit about flying carpets. Hope Rose gets to ride one sometime during this fic. XD Non-plot-related though it might be.

"Hogwarts is the safest place in the world." HAHAHAHAHAHAHA.

I probably told you this before, but doesn't hurt to say it again: I really like how quickly we get introduced to the mystery and the action in this chapter. Get the ball rolling. And the way you set up the characters. Rose in particular, knowing some of what's to come, I think you did a very good job of establishing the relevant character traits.

(How very inconvenient of the plant to grab them just then and alert the intruder to their presence.) Y'know, the description of the grenade makes much more sense in hindsight. XD

I get a little thrown by Smith's written accent. Doesn't seem quite right, but I'm not sure how to fix that. Wording choices? Idk.

I maintain that the teachers are utter dumbasses at the end. They should have sent Larry and Rose to the hospital wing. Smoke inhalation! Respiratory distress! DEATH! *grumbles* The dismissal seems a little abrupt as well, the shift from questioning to "now these two need to go to bed". Ah well.

*cackles* I'd forgotten Larry was a little pickpocket here.

Off to bed with them and on to the next chapter for me! (There, proof I'm reading! XD)

Hullo xD

I approve of opening a chapter with Larry snapping at people. I quite like Larry, which I must restate because it’s something that really should not be forgotten. Uno is a good game, but I wonder why they haven’t enchanted the cards to have some new magical variations and rules for added fun. We also learn from this that Larry is a bit of a sore loser since he isn’t taking well to being hit with all the trick cards, but I don’t know if that’s just him or if it’s just the game. We’ll need to see him play Monopoly, Chess, and Scrabble and lose at those to gauge his reactions in future.

*Sigh* And Rose is on. *Changes channel*

I also like that Curly regards Larry as an angry beast when he’s about to lose. It speaks a lot to their friendship and it also gives more hints to Larry’s beastly nature – once again, I can’t remember if I’ve asked before, but is the Beast curse carried over as lycanthropy in this universe?

That aside, we get more Three Stooges wholesemness as Larry the Stud and Mister Power of Friendship decide to talk up Moe – which it’s made evident this is a standard thing – and are therefore competent wingmen. Honestly, I can get behind the side-plot of trying to get Moe laid. Give him to Tammy. She seems nice. Hufflepuffs are all friendly.

Rose said something, but I’m afraid the TV was on mute because I was on the phone during her lines.

And Moe marches off on his quest to take pictures and get shagged by Tammy. Or just take dirty photos of her. Whichever one happens, I think the ship is getting loaded in the harbour and will set sail shortly. And Rose quickly tries to stab herself in the ear, thereby proving why peanuts packets come with “may contain nuts” warning labels. Honestly, this may be her Bitch-Eating Crackers vibe, but I’m incessantly annoyed that she somehow believed the sharp side goes into your ears when there’s an ear-cavity shaped pod right there.

Don’t go chasing waterfalls! Please stick to the rivers and the lakes that you’re used to. *Jams out*

Larry, I can’t believe I once shipped you with that woman. You deserve better.

Once again, I like Alister. Why can’t we follow him around some more? He’s chill, he has white hair, and his Mother is Elsa. Plus, he’s dating the current MVP of this series, and she’s so feisty that I’m pretty sure she has some dragon in her. Ravens… Raven-headed staffs… Diaval was a raven… Is Raven the daughter of Maleficent? I approve wholeheartedly of this imagery. Look at Alister wrapping an arm around his lover all couply.

Alister Frost – Yes, House of Frost, come through!

Ok, so Curly is being naïve and stupid again, but it sort of works with his whole motif given he’s like a happy-go-lucky puppy, and it doesn’t detract from him. Reading about him wondering what went wrong makes me think of Honey from HIMYM – you just want to wrap him in a blanket, give him some soup, and tell him to stop thinking before he strains something. Anyway, moving on to the crux of the issue. His girlfriend – and let’s face it, nobody in the world is fooled by the will-they won’t they – is perhaps the worst human being in the school with an utterly robotic nature and lacking the good sense the gods gave a lampshade. She’d find a Sunday constitutional to be disagreeable and she’ll probably one day use a comb on her rugs to make sure all the threads face in the same direction.

You can’t help those who refuse to help themselves, Curly, please move on and lets return to Moe’s clubwork, Alister’s relationship drama, Curry bromance, the Uno game…

Ok, but we get to see more of the dragon lady and she gets candy flung at her? Anyway, I like the surly sailor taffy because it sounds like George has monetized by standard vocabulary. Fun, anyway, and I want to smuggle some of this into Minnie’s breakfast so we get her dropping F and C bombs for the entire first period. Oooooh, and do I spy some femmeslash between errr… Miss Dragon Lady and Genderbent Christopher? I ship it.

And look at Moe getting some tail. Not only has he put in good headway with his lovely Tammy, but he got a kiss on the cheek from a woman who’s somehow colder than the Frosts. I never considered that he was autistic, though, but it actually explains quite a bit and adds a bit of reason to his rhyme. And yaaas, Rapz shows up in a business suit because she is a boss-ass bitch and is going to slash the stock market and invent hair potion, all before dinner. Also Belle being literally Hermione meets Mister Weasley in terms of questioning everyone is a nice nod to the fact that they share an actress.

Aaah, and my good mood improves with the arrival of Grandpa Will, who is pretty much the only member of that incredibly awful family that I want to spend time with. There’s just a breath of realism in there which balances him out so much and though he’s such a side-character, he elevates all the characters whenever he shows up. Even Siggy becomes palatable when Will is around.

Eugene, don’t do this to me! How dare you be a manual-shift driver and deride automatic-shift! Driving is like, a chore, so why would we make chores more difficult rather than make them easier? Self-driving cars sound perfect to me. He immediately endears himself to me, as does Grandpa Will, by being the best wingmen. Sadly, once again, these two kids don’t have the good sense that the gods gave to a pair particularly intelligent bedsheets. It also makes me doubt how good Curly is at being smooth given he not once tried to pull the body heat thing on Rose.

Well, that was indeed a chapter. Onwards, I say, into the House of Doom and Gloom aka That Depressing Mansion where Siggy lives, wherein he plans how to make everyone else more miserable. Hopefully there’ll be more Grandpa Will.

-Ciao Mate

Okay, starting on this as promised. Read the summary and loved it... Intrigued already and can't wait to dive in :)

Hullo xD

I got busy with GoT and work stuff and this is late [Edit – and then you distracted me with more GoT stuff and Endgame stuff, so this is even more late]. Anyway, let’s hop right into this. My predictions for this chapter involve LaRose in the Ravenclaw dormitories while Curly braids flower-crowns with the magical terrorists because friendship solves all problems.

Oh, Rose is being a frosty bitch to her friends. This is brand new information and I’ll be honest, I’m not a fan of that scene at all. We’ve seen her mellow a lot over the previous chapters so this just feels like it’s being undone and she’s reverting to roboRose who is all about rules and nothing else. I mean, come on, even Hermione broke the rules all the time, and unless you’re saying Rose is a better teacher’s pet than Hermione… yeah.

Also, Rose fighting her impulse to be on drugs, which kudos, drugs are bad for you, kids. Except weed. This has been my Ted Talk. Anyway, I’m still questioning whether this is a good idea and we’re going to see Rose thrown out of her element. Aaah, I like this bit of Rose a bit more when she’s doubting herself a lot while still pushing on – it’s the How can a man be brave if he’s afraid/That’s the only time a man can be brave theme, and it works here. Raven seems in high spirits, and now we’re going into curse work… That sounds like a wonderful idea.

…

What is happening? Am I actually starting to like Raven here? You know what, I am. Raven should be the main character of this thing because this bitch gets shit done. She’s got a good head on her shoulders, with a chip as well, but she’s got a lot of mettle. I like that in a character. Her calling Rose the fuck out for something that’s worth being called out is a time turnaround from the purebloods suck shtick. Team Raven for the win.

Bravo, Raven! Curly does indeed deserve better. And, come to think of it, so does Larry. He also ended up on the receiving end of Rose’s bullshit. Huh. I didn’t think it would happen, but you sort of just sank my desire for LaRose. You know what this means, though? Currence is not in business. Let’s go, Sun Beast! Full steam ahead.

I want to feel bad for Rose here. I do… but you know, the girls kinda have a point. No further comments but yeah, they pretty much have a point and Rose doesn’t really have a leg to stand on to argue against them. The Curly scene at the end kind of annoys me. I just… don’t care about Rose at this point, because she is the architect of her own destruction, her own inner saboteur, and whenever she takes a step forward, she takes two steps back. Like, the Raven scene was a breakthrough. She confronted it to an extent with the nagging voice telling her that Raven was right – because Raven was right. Rose is hella unlikable. Then, she goes right around and ends up doing her woe is me shtick with Curly, and she puts it across that Raven was the one in the wrong when, erm no. I’m not going to say I hate her because I don’t, but I’m not going to deny that this chapter is the tipping point where I stop reading to find out about her story and instead read because I’m invested in the supporting cast. I love Larry. I mock Curly, but he’s endearing. Disliking Moe is my running gag, but he’s pretty cool here. I enjoyed Catalina since TSP, and now Raven is my new MVP.

Been a while since I reviewed a HP, even though it's not my usual cup of tea. Apologies for a late review since the last time I checked, the thread wasn't budging.

Important thing that I should mention is that it's an interesting idea for you to write up a story and base it on the perspective of other people who's name is not Harry Potter.

For the meantime, I'll chime in with how you start the story off with writing enough (I hope) to give the readers a good description of Rose even though one will be tempted to read off the nearest wiki just in case.

For the transition to the second scene, I don't know if it's a sudden one or if it's done on purpose. I don't know if it's changed, but maybe some words on what happened to Rose prior to the scene transition would be nice.

Reading on, I'm certainly enjoying the tensions going on in the chapter when the fire started to break out and all hell breaking loose just to put it out. The suspense where Rose heads in to help Larry out was certainly full of tense.

The event where a plant was saved was certainly funny, but heartwarming in a way. That's all I can say.

The chapter certainly does have its moment and the conspiracy's about to start.

Hullo xD

Gosh, we're beginning with Moe. Well, I'm a good sailor even when the seas are rough so I shall try my best to endure his dulcet tones. Honestly, I can't quite put my finger on what it is about Moe in MiB that irritates me, and I finally realized the answer. His portrayal in TSP is so awful and his character there is so utterly boring to me that it's ended up leaking out of that story and this Moe is very much tarred by association. So, really, I don't think this Moe is all that bad in terms of characterization, but I've just been a bit trained to tune him out.

[Sank in it] should be [Sank into it]

Lol, so Rose is a magical girl, is she? I now have the image of her transforming before battle like the characters in Sailor Moon. Basically the battle freezes, she dances around a glittery backdrop and poses as her clothes change from normal gear to ridiculous fan-service, and then she poses dramatically before jumping into the fight while screaming out the names of her attack.

Rose is from Winx Club/Sailor Moon/Crystal Kingdom confirmed.

So Moe freaks out a bit because it appears as though Curly is plotting to build himself a harem, but then it comes out that it was all a misunderstanding and that Curly actually wants to just get Raven to stop bullying Rose... But didn't Larry take care of that in the last chapter? I'm pretty sure that Larry did by shutting her the fuck down and the real problem is Husniya who is torturing Rose with illegal magic.

Speaking of Rose, she's very terrible at explaining a show. I'm quite lost about this Lady Kenna (Reign?)and the Iron Fleet (GoT) and Hex (Marvel?). Gosh, has Rose been reading crossover fanfiction because that would actually make sense given that these all strike me as conflicting viewpoints.

Why would he read it himself when you've gone and spoiled the whole plot for him, Rose? *Flicks Rose on nose*

Red... I can't believe you've done this and gone and given them a Choices Visual Novel to read. I thought Kenna sounded familiar but I was confused because I never played past the first few bits of that particular story. But this is unconscionable. Where are the choices if it's a normal novel?

Oh God, Curly is how old again? He's too old to believe in the power of friendship being able to solve everything and this actually sells him quite short as a character in my opinion. Like, it makes him come across as a person whose incredibly naive and sheltered to the point of not knowing how people actually work and is honestly really giving off Dora the Explorer vibes at this point. Yay, friendship, but no, you don't make friends with your bully because that's just not how life works outside of tropes.

I'm not going to comment much on the next scene but it just feels very unrealistic to me, but then again, I understand that I have a very jaded view of the world and so I'll refrain from commenting. On a personal level, the whole thing rubs me the wrong way because talking doesn't fix this kind of stuff.

But, my mood is immediately alleviated by the appearance of my favourite twisted son of a bitch. Rhett, you make everything so much better. Anyways, Rhett tries to flirt with Rose a bit and Moe/Larry jump in to behave to ensure Rosary occurs, but they're not very subtle, are they? And then the two people who just don't have any idea about anything romance related decide to do homework *face-palms*

And now I have the Raven/Rose friendship solves all our problems things to look forward too, so let's hope it doesn't come to that.

-Ciao Mate

Greetings.

It's Theodore Hawkwood from Reverse Tag once again. Great to once again getting the privilege to read and review this fanfic once again. It has been entirely too long. My apologies, once again, if I fail to grasp any Harry Potter references as it's been a while since I read or watched any of that material.

The first four paragraphs remind me of the puppy phase of my parent's German Shepherd Dog. Though I know Fitz is a Cat, but the 'cuteness' factor to try and derail the annoyance of the two-legged one's wrath aspect is something that crosses the boundary of cat and dog. That made me smile.

Reading still further, I have to smile at Larry's French greeting. It is a nice bit of characterization for this individual, for sure.

I had to grin at the Cat and Curly dialogue, namely the bit of flirting regarding the Venus Flower and how scars are a major turn on. I get a brief sense of possible pairing from these two from there. Perhaps it's from my tendency to write male and female characters who disagree on certain issues (see Conrad and Kate), but I cannot help but ship these two based on that scar comment.

I gave a great belly laugh heard round my living room when I read the bit of dialogue with Professor Moore as to why the potion they were being taught was known as liquid courage. That nod to our real (read: Muggle) world was well done and one that I had to smile.

The bit where Rose and Curly are brewing their potions also was something I found to be of interest. As a fellow who likes to cook and prepare his own meals I had to grin at Curly's modifications to the recipe. His philosophy of experimenting a bit with recipes versus Rose's stick-to-what's-on-paper is a fascinating contrast. In short, I find it great that with that chunk of dialogue you managed to have me invoke my (okay not so internalized) Iron Chef.

Yikes! The venom between Rose, Cat, and Raven in their argument about Muggleborn versus Purebloods shows us that this conflict is still very much alive even following the events of the Harry Potter books. I find that a very realistic look, because conflicts like that do not disappear overnight.

Rose's assessment of Curly versus Cat's respective stances on romantic relationships sounds like a classic case of Opposites Attract (yes, a deliberate Paula Abdul reference). I have to grin at these diametrically opposed viewpoints, though if they do get involved I do hope neither of them gets burned for the experience.

Great Work.

Theodore Hawkwood

Hullo xD

I see that they are obviously in Care of Magical Creatures and dealing with nonsense from Hagrid. I don’t think his teaching methods are appropriate but who am I to judge. I also like how Curly is just chilling to the side while Larry the Stud and Moe the Meh are having to do a bunch of hard work. This goes to show how Curly being incapable of following a plan pays off – he can trap Demiguises. It’s not a profitable venture but it’s a decent hobby, I’d wager. I also like that we can a degree of bro type banter going on here.

Also, isn’t the expression headless chickens and not headless flies? I is confused

I admit that hunting them in the snow would be too easy given that they leave prints, and I really like that a classroom was converted into an outdoors simulation. It adds to the magic of it all. However, I do question them heading straight to the Great Hall rather than to the showers. The showers are important after physical activity. Go clean up, boys, you all likely stink.

Oh dear… Rose has a weird thing about swans. I get this because her dad fetishizes the damn things so it makes sense. That aside, I’m quite intrigued by the manner in which she reacts to it – caught between courtesy and revulsion. Sansa would be able to handle this much better, in my opinion. Oh gosh and now Larry and Moe are shipping them. Well it’s about time. They need to get together already and just do couple things because this dancing around each other all the time is getting more ridiculous than Romione.

So Mulan’s daughter is here as well – funny that her name is Fa given that Mulan’s marital name would be Li, so her name would be Li Liling in actuality, unless Mulan has decided to go at it alone as a single lady. I don’t know. She’s also got a stereotypical name since she’s called a dragon which I can’t help but feel is because she’s Asian and now I think that the Gryffindors are all racists. Terrible business really. Also Husniya is a DeVille – this makes her last bout of crucio nonsense make sense. And Liling marches in and catches her doing bad things to Rose.

There are terrorists in the school but they’re letting prefects go about fighting them. God, Hogwarts really is a terrible school. It’s ridiculous. And now we had the oddly racist Scottish stereotype to the dragon lady and I’m thinking this whole school needs a good talking too. Seriously, that accent is at House of Night levels of eyebrow raising.

[wield Muggle a weapon] – something seems off with this sentence.

Thank God for Victoire – she has her priorities on straight. They are not Dumbledore’s Army and they cannot fight a war within the school. They just need to call on Minnie so she can whack a few evil terrorists. I’m sure she’s capable of wrecking shit even if they have magical protection.

And the Rose on Drugs plot comes to a startling conclusion that proves Larry is really the one for Rose and not Curly… like at this point it isn’t even a competition anymore. Are you aware that you’re basically writing a Lawrose romance with all this subtext at this point? They just come across as so much more wholesome and supportive of each other. It’s like… all signs tell us that it’s Curly and Rose… but all those same signs SHOW us it’s Lawrose. This is troubling.

Overall, Teddy is now off to see Minnie and the magical terrorists cannot come through the secret tunnel. Huzzah. Next!

-Ciao Mate

Hullo xD

So when last we left off, Rose was about to do battle with a bunch of Blast Ended Skrewts because Raven is a bitch and likes to start shit, and Teddy also got thrown through a wall but survived. Anyway, onwards into this new chapter. My prediction is that the Skrewts will eat Raven and Rose will make out with Larry in the bushes.

I’m going to just come out and say that this is a false cliffhanger, Red! You get us all hyped up for an epic battle and then it’s resolved in like three paragraphs. Rose uses a shieldcharm and then Larry shows up with his plants to completely wreck things, stud that he is. The skrewt didn’t even know what hit it when Larry showed up and got a Snargaluff to eat it. Go Larry! I also think that it’s quite amusing how they decide to go for snacks right after as if this is just an everyday thing that they do.

Larry is quite good with the burns, and he’s quite sassy as well. See, this is why he’s the best of the trio. I agree that Raven is quite stupid and isn’t even really trying at this point. You’d think she’d come up with better material given that she’s so one-dimensional as an easy-to-hate schoolyard bully type character.

Insert random backstory from TSP – see my comments from that review, Miss Recycle!

Oh, so Belle was part of the crew who came to Hogwarts with Fleur? Huh, I wonder if she keeps in touch and thus tangentially knows some of the Weasleys. It would be an interesting connection to make, I think. That aside, I wonder how Fleur managed to beat Belle of all people if they both put their names into the Goblet, which canonically they did since the visiting schools only brought potential champions.

Erm is Rose on drugs? Did I miss something? I need to know. Rose going on a bender is actually the best thing right now for her character. She should ruffle her feathers and have her teenage rebellion moment, live her extra life a bit and show her father that she is her own woman and she can do drugs if she wants to. Honestly, it’s startling to see her taking potions, but then again this is a tale of magical muggle terrorists so caution has been thrown to the wind already.

So Husniya is going around casting the Cruciatus on people. Interesting. I think this is rather strange but erm we’ll go with it. Times have changed and kids are a lot more powerful now. I do dislike how it plays into the all Slytherins are evil stereotype, but she might be the exception that proves the rule.

Overall, a good chapter. Now, onto the next one.