So i guess at the end you decided to go with a sappy dramatic romance between a 33 year old and a 5 year old

i really really hate this. your MC keeps contradicting herself and it feels like you're just trying to fill the story with drama. This woman was not her real mother. she can't just give up on her real family and start crying over some murderer that she barely spent anytime with. Oh kakashi said that my mother died fir the will of fire, why didn't you say so? who cares if we live in a military dictatorship where they indoctrinate children and send them to war, i'll just become one of them for the sake of a woman i barely spent any time with !

It was going so well until you had to say "it's my home and I want to help protect it."
Firstly, she spent 5 years in this world wgere murder is normal behavior as opposed to the 28 years in her normal world. i'd rather describe this place as hell rather than a home.
Second, she just admitted to the kim jong un of naruto to his face that she believes that his system is flawed.
Third, she just went against every argument she made in the past 3 chapters and decided that she's going to be part of the system in order to change the system.

Why not just tell the Hokage: oh hey maybe my fake mother died a pointless death so i want to become strong enough to avoid it. At least that's less suspicious that literally telling shinobi that they shouldn't exist. What makes her think she can revolutionize the system in the first place, especially with that kind of "home" perspective? you don't see me joining north korea's military and claiming i'll turn the regime from military dictatorship to democracy

kirigane kinda reminds me of ichigo from bleach (not really sure why)
i wonder what will the others think of her using the rasengan

kirigane is a fabulous character, her sword makes me think of ichigo from bleach and i greatly admire ukiyo and her character developement, i feel it is vey realistic and believable, not everything nice and cheery and perfect. i'm exited to read about how her suiton-fightingstyle and her work with the rasengan will evolve and about live in the genin corps and her fellow unlucky genins.
i hope your situation is better and i wish you the best of luck!

ha! nice take on the afterlife! this is the first time i didn't want to rip my hair out in frustation because somebody met fate or god or a higher beeing. really great and exceptional.
love the paperwork jokes.

I'm sorry about the chickens and maybe this wasnt perfect for you but I love it! Ukiyo dedication at the end... I'm so proud

please continue this

kirigane is the best

she thought that she ended up killing the dog was really sad
but the story so far is good

aw please update

You have a really good grasp on character development and the emotions. A very good writer.
But why leave this incomplete :/

This is a really fun story, can’t wait to read more :D

Wow.. she had standards but she suddenly doesn’t..
I mean sure agreeing to spending time with kakashi is ok.. but she won’t even tell minato that he’s being cruel ugh

Hold up, what if that 'light at the end of the tunnel' everybody associates with death is the first memory of rebirth? Like seeing the light of the hospital room, if you were reborn in one, during birth. (Felt like typing it so I could remember it, but the start of this chapter got me thinking on it.)