Always wondered what happened to Susan after she lost her family. I got kind of teary reading this.

I have loved the Narnia books since I was a child. I am now in my 50's and your story gave me goosebumps, well done.

That was very very sweet. I was a little surprised about Jack being so young, as Lewis was well into his 40s when he wrote the books I believe. But yeah, lovely way to reconnect. But what was Lucy doing having a house when so young and to leave to her nephew and for Susan to know nothing about it until now? I don't think that really made sense, but beautifully written, all of it. Thanks.

Wow, this story is AMAZING! I absolutely loved it!

that was awesome!

This was so beautiful! I love how you brought the rest of the family back into the story. And I like that it's a redemption story for Susan. I'm very sure Susan would've come back to Aslan and Narnia again, and I wouldn't be surprised if it was her family's death that brought her back. God uses tragedies like that to bring us back to Him, so I can see the same thing happening to Susan. I really like the little bit of bonding between Susan and Jack. They both really needed that. Fantastic story!

Oh my gracious! Please, oh please, continue this! I want to know more! Especially about Jack. Where did he come from? Who's his mom? Please write more! I love this!

Hey, it was beautiful. Susan's fate breaks my heart and you capture her sadness wonderfully. I'll just ask you to look after the technical stuff in your writing. Otherwise it's beautiful and captivating. :)

I loved the twist at the end. But I am very curious to know how it was that Peter had a son. Was Jack born in Narnia then transported to our world? I feel like there's another story to tell here.

I loved this! It's amazing. I really hope this was real.

I want more please!

That was awesome, and SO UNEXPECTED! I know it's a one shot, but it would be nice to get another chapter or two