| Reviews for The Demon Within |
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  Brooke Jackson chapter 12 . 4/2/2017 This is awesome! I want to read more! |
 RRatedauthor chapter 12 . 3/15/2017 Okay, I have binge-read 11 of the first twelve chapters and am ready to give you my honest opinion. Firstly, I did not read the intro because it was too short and I assumed it was just that, an intro to Sara and after the one-shot I did for ya, I think I know her well enough. The whole Jekyll-and-Hyde personas I did not expect, nor did I expect you to get into the love interest part that quickly. Both were well-done, even though I am not the biggest reader of het smut on the planet. Showing both sides of Finn, and the different reactions from Sara really added to the character depth that usually also takes a few more chapters to fully flesh out. That said, I do think Sara jumped into this relationship a little quickly. I know she can be an impulsive bitch some (or all) the time, but it seemed a little rushed. More build up would have been better. I'm not sure how much research you did on Irish mythology, and I was frankly too lazy to do it myself, but it sounded believable. Mythology can be tough to write around, so I wish you luck in that. Taker's backstory fits really nicely and adds some good elements to the conflict. Cooper as a Pegasus? I can believe that! Balor/Carman (and their human alter-egos)... can't wait to see where you take that. Update soon! |
| alexisrawrs chapter 12 . 3/13/2017 I absolutely love this story so far! I'm excited for more! |
| Ambrosealley88 chapter 10 . 3/10/2017 Chicago? Shit, she's going to Punk isn't she? Oh boy. |
| Ambrosealley88 chapter 8 . 3/10/2017 Shit Mark. You really should have shown up a bit sooner than you did. |
| Fandomfanatic2 chapter 12 . 3/10/2017 I kinda wanna run Punk over with my car then back up and do it again...but so far great story! |
| Fandomfanatic2 chapter 10 . 3/10/2017 HOLY Crap! Chicago? Please don't tell me she's going to see who I think she's going to see is she? |
| alexisrawrs chapter 10 . 3/10/2017 why do I have a feeling that Punk is gonna be brought into this soon? |
| alexisrawrs chapter 9 . 3/10/2017 Oooh. This story is amazing so far! |
| Fandomfanatic2 chapter 8 . 3/10/2017 Oh Snap! I Loved it, I can't wait to see what happens next. story took an unexpected turn for sure though |
| Ambrosealley88 chapter 6 . 3/9/2017 Alright, I finally had time to get caught up and I love it. I demand more. Gimmie gimmie gimmie please. |
| Fandomfanatic2 chapter 6 . 3/9/2017 LOVE It! Can't wait to see what happens next! |
| alexisrawrs chapter 6 . 3/9/2017 I love this so far! |
