I really like this one shot. :D I also think that it would make a fantastic base for an actual story. like a summary of what all went on and then continue after this is set...or something like that...I can actually see it as a full story. I really can. :D That is how much I had liked the way it flowed and showed promise.

I hope to see a full story from it. :D Please let me know if it is a feasible idea to do.

Not bad for a short. You may want to have someone beta this one you switched from first person to third person a few times. Kagome and Hiei is like my naughty pleasure so I love any and all stories with them as the pairing.

Like. Just as an FYI thrusted isn't a word, the past tense of thrust is thrust.