I really liked this fic!

There were a TON of grammar errors ("Torts"? I think you mean "Towards"), but the idea was solid and the characters well thought out.

3.5/5 for exceedingly poor grammar, but I would very much like to see more!

Another new OFF fanfiction! *hugs*

Alright, so, a lot happened in this chapter, with a major time skip, and OFF can now live up to its name as "a nice game for cute children." I kind of hope that you'll elaborate on some of the new changes there.

-UltimateVulpix (Though... *coughs* You may or may not know me as Lucid Whispers? ...Um. Yeah. Bye.)

Please make more