Apologies for typos in my two reviews! :)

I’m curious . . . Is English your native tongue or a second language? You had so many grammar issues that I thought you might speak a different language. Every one has some typos no problem there, but do you know what a preposition is? I don’t think so based on the horrible way they were used incorrectly; plus verb tenses, synonyms and antonyms? If you want to be a writer I highly recommend taking an English grammar class OR get the BEST editor you can to proofread your stories.

Soooo . . . I still think you have a talent for writing, telling an interesting tale. This one was a bit too emo for my tastes and too much reliance on excerpting songs in the story and repeating phrases in all caps. Guess where that is where the pain comes from?

I would recommend this to people in the YOI fandom since there’s not much worth reading out there in general. Don’t know whether there should be warnings for character death. Has a Asian like ending in some ways which can be nice not getting another happy ever after one tale. Poor Yuri!

Kudos are in order for COMPLETING the story!

Okay time for a review thus far. First, you are one of a handful of YOI fanfic writers or can actually write or have the potential talent to do so. Second, I applaud your attempt to develop an interesting plot unlike most who just stay with the anime script. But the story line is pretty weak - there’s no mystery or surprise here; it’s too predictable. The seduction scene of Viktor’s infidelity is unbelievable - a small? woman overpowering a man is not going to happen. Of course young men think with their dick so I guess it’s plausible?

I recommend you get an editor to clean up your sentence structure - two paragraphs repeated at the end of chapter two and typos. Will comment again later in the story.

This was the first victuuri fanfic that I've read and I've got no regrets, it was really great and I've got very emotional while reading however, while I was searching for new fanfic to read I saw this story with the same title and almost the same content(cause I think some chapters on the ending part were modified) on wattpad and I was wondering if the original author herself is the one who published that because some parts of the story on the latter part were changed and the personality of the author on her notes in wattpad were somehow different compared to the author here. Was the story stolen from here or what? I wish my suspicions are wrong.

This was the first victuuri fanfic that I've read and I've got no regrets, it was really great and I've got very emotional while reading however, while I was searching for new fanfic to read I saw this story with the same title and almost the same content(cause I think some chapters on the ending part were modified) on wattpad and I was wondering if the original author herself is the one who published that because some parts of the story on the latter part were changed and the personality of the author on her notes in wattpad were somehow different compared to the author here. Was the story stolen from here or what? I wish my suspicions are wrong.

This story played with my emotions so much and the ending is making me become a waterfall and omggggg I love and hate this story

...I’m not exactly sure what to say, or think, about that ending.

You made me cry

Such an interesting story... Had fun reading it. But why!? Why did they have to die
At least they got their happy ending...

See, I like this story and all but the end note confused me. No choice? Victor had plenty of choice! he could have told Yuuri about the mistake he made and how he was being blackmailed on a private phone chat and then at least he would absolved of his guilt. It seems like the author's mindset of "choices" is a bit flawed here.
the story shows Victor's flawed thinking, but good god writer, THERE IS A CHOICE. A difficult choice, but definitely the right one. please make sure your readers KNOW that there was a choice to be made and Victor made the wrong one here to continue lying to Yuuri. Bad sign of a relationship right there, which is precisely why I would dump someone's ass of it happened to me IRL

What is love? Baby don't hurt me... don't hurt me no more.

I couldn't help myself, sorry xD

weird

THIS IS SO GOOD I'M TRYING NOT TO CRY IN CLASS RIGHT NOW!

Stop... cutting the onions!

Great it's one of those again NEXT FANFICTION PLEASE