Hi ! Can u, u know, update this story ? Unless, of course, you forgot your readers who are impatiently awaiting the rest of the story? Or even that you wrote this story in the first place?

In this case, just give the story to someone who will care to write it or just say "give up" in the summary.

I love how everyone keeps body flickering away from her, like "Ahh yes, great suggestion IMGONNAGOUSEITRIGHTNOWBYE!" but out loud its just that "hn" sound. Anywayys love your writing, love this story specifically!

I thought this was going to be an alright story and the Grammar is good, so the story isn't hard to read. the first things that turned me off of the story was the first person. I've never liked first person and never will. Growing up going through school, we were always told it was better to write in third person and for good reason. It feels more like a story and less like an Autobiography when you write in third person and since I'm not the character in the story, it makes even less sense to imagine it as if it were me.

Secondly, I'm okay with your story being more serious and how you make the character older. What I'm not okay with is having a three year old having complex conversations with her parents. No three year old, regardless of whether or not they are older in mind or not, will have these types of conversations at three. Learning a foreign language especially wouldnt be done in three years. It takes at least 5 years to be adequate in a language. If the Naruto universe is speaking your native language then the complaint is somewhat moot, but the point still stands. The topics that a child is having with the adult are highly unlikely to occur.

These reasons are why I cant continue this story. I'm sorry.

I love the premise but your spelling mistakes made it really hard to get through the first chapter. Please get a proofreader or an editor

Is this story ever going to be updated ?

Chiyo-chan is love. I hope you keep updating. Thanks

Well that worked out surprisingly well for Chiyome! I'm glad that Hizashi won't be sacrificed - or that's what I'm hoping. Loving this story so far, :)

I'm really looking forward to read if Chiyome can save the clan! hopefully she can , Fugaku seems to be not that negative , and the ties between other clans are strong ! This is a really great fic! please update soon!

Thanks for Writing! I'm digging this story so far and looking forward to what you have planned!

This story seems interesting so far, I can't wait to see where you take it! I hope Chiyome can befriend Naruto soon though and that the clan stuff works out.

Hm, in some ways I do hope the massacre will happen and it will cause a divide between Chiyome and her friends. Not like Sasuke in canon where he gives off a brooding aura of hatred, but a lonely aura of despair, she will be sad? and that would be the perfect moment to introduce Naruto into the story, where he gradually makes her happier and during the chunnin exams she's finally ready to open up only for her to gain the curse seal. Idk, just an idea of mine. I hope she'll be stronger than Sasuke, I always thought Pre Shippuden Sasuke was too weak to be called a genius and so on, while Naruto got stronger Sasuke was stuck in time and he only really advanced when he got the Chidori (cursed seal aka borrowed power doesn't count no matter how awesome it is)

Aah, great job so far. I hope there won't be too much angst, I'm not really one for angst in stories since most people can't seem to get it right.

Oh! Me gusta mucho este fanfiction por favor continúa con la historia! Espero con ansias la continuación!

You need an editor for your spelling mistakes or proofread...

Aw that's so cute and just what a child would ask. Adults are always stumped by the simplest of questions.