OMG, this is gold!

That was hysterical.

Hahahaha! Can't-breath! That was great! Looking forward to more from you! This made me laugh! Loved the part with Keith saying, "If you die, what do you want us to tell your family?" My favorite! The ending was so sweet too.

Great ending: ) made me laugh a great deal: )

Charming. Your dialog is both funny and true to the characters. There's nice rhythm to the way the conversations progress, especially in the "worse case scenario" scene.

And I liked the way you structured the sections with each of Keith's attempt being more harebrained the previous. The concluding scene with Shiro brought it all nicely together and Keith's relief at not having to be the leader any more worked well.

Keep up the great work.

This was good. I want to see this in an episode! I loved it! Keep up the amazing work!

Awseome chapter and yeah that is worth .