Awww cute

its nice to see such a great story continued, but the grammar is horrible

XD a alternated version of first love xD love it at least lincoln show more of his man instinct good job mate. It was a good short story

Ok then. Umm... Well umm... This was short.

There's not really much I can say. At least with the other Underrated Hero Fanfic Fanfic, there was substance I could talk about, but this... well...

So, I'm a yugioh fan, I can relate, the movie was great in my opinion. The duels were awesome!

So, plotline: There was... very little here.
Storytelling: Same thing.
Grammar: Needs work. For example, quotation marks when someone speaks. Capitalization doesn't force points across. Also spacing things out would make it easier to read.
Impact: A fanfic of a fanfic should try to expand upon the idea of the original. I don't know what else to say.

I kinda am stuck on the rating this time around. I wish you the best.