My initial gut reaction is, NO. I really don't like it when authors here use a first person POV for the main character, it almost never works out. But I'm gonna give this a shot since I've read literally every other bwen fic worth spending time with and I still need more. Hopefully this doesn't dissapoint

Is it purposeful that Ben doesn't seem all there?

it's a great fanfic so far I ain't done yet, but I keep reading ultimate spiderman the video game references in the dialogue. was that intentional cause I got it.

To much damn angst understandable angst but still too much for me

This is a very confusing story

This is getting weirder and weirder

Spider Ben

So uhh do you think you could possibly revisit this story and edit the beginning so it's not a huge wall of text?

I'm only persisting because so many people like it because otherwise I would've bailed on the first chapter.

Dude, is this a fucking spiderman comic cuz I can swear I'm feeling some mj and Peter Parker vibes

So...you're not even trying to hide the fact that this is more of a Spider-Man fanfiction than it is a Ben 10 fanfiction now?

Okay, what the fuck am i reading exactly? At this point im not sure. Im not hating or anything but this shit is just confusing now. The characters are way OOC for unclear reasons, there's so many plot holes it hurts, and events are happening randomly. I could be more specific but i dont feel like taking the time to breakdown all the problems. Still commend you for finishing the story.

I'm gonna assume Ben is just going crazy and this is not how he would usually act.

I know this is old but this needs some extreme tuning to make any character interactions seem orgnanic. Everything just reads like their cliff-notes and we're missing the something.

His actions toward the watch and how he is reacting to being labeled a villain are really awkward.

Too dramatic to be believable, too be honest. Also him throwing the watch is just feels like obvious build-up to more drama. Hope I'm wrong or its at least good drama.