Sad to see you go from here, but I also follow you on the other site. Thank you for trying on this site though. I can't wait for your updates on the other sites.

Sounds like a bad time to have to fight against a goddess

Poor blake, what'd you get yourself into?

All four chapters are amazingly written! Great job on everything, the whole story just flows and I found myself at the end of chapter four before I knew it. I cant wait for more updates.

i know ur writing is 'just' a hobby for u but after reading every of your storys so far i have to day: dang imo u have the potential for publishing writer.
but hey as long as you enjoy ur writing it doesn't matter what others say about it.
so take ur time and write something u can enjoy. and if some haters r thinking there opinion are soo important. so be it. so have fun xD and I'll wait for more of ur great fic's
read'ya

I'm going to assume that Salem isn't being facetious when she says that she's a goddess, considering what she can do.
It is worth baring that the ultimate evil in Egyptian mythology is the Serpent, Apep/Apophis. I'm neither expecting nor asking that he appears, but if Salem is a goddess, then it does represent an opportunity bring Egyptian mythology further into this.

I love it! This is the first story placed in ancient Egipt I like. I have never though that I would like story about ancient Egipt but I was so wrong! I can't wait for next chapter! :D

Wow this is getting really good so can we get a little back story on why they want yang?

Quick question? I don't know if I missed this or not but do people have a semblance? I have a good feeling Yang is going to be a natural fighter after a while of training :3

The scope looks to be impressive if you're using those four.
Something tells me that Yang may need more than the basics. It still begs the question, why Yang?
I love reading all your stories. It's hard to pick a favorite. :)
See you next chapter.

Great chapter! I wonder what the baddies are plotting to do with the princess. :/ I love the bumbleby moments. :D Looking forward to reading more. :D

Oh Blake what did you get yourself into lol

please continue this story

I like this story I just finished reading the 3 chapters you had up. I wonder if Cinder is really dead or somehow came back to life. I hope Tai keeps Yang in the city. I wonder if the reason Yang was attacked because of her mother or they wanted to make Ruby week. Keep up the good work can't wait to read more.

I'm so glad you're back! I missed your stories! I must say you've done an outstanding job with this writing! :3 Looking forward to the next piece