Dang. The ending tho? Your writing was so good. Keep up the good work.

Première partie intéressante, marrante et normale mais après ...

Hot stuff. Too bad about how it ended.

Well this was certainly spicy! And so well written too. I think you did a great job of keeping them in character too; Goten's innocence and Gohan's soft practicality. And good lord, I was almost as embarrassed as him at those flurries of questions lol. the one note of criticism I'll give is the abrupt ending. An ending doesn't have to be happy for me to enjoy, mind you but this one just left much to be desired. it was so suddenly and concise but nonetheless, I enjoyed this little one shot so great job!