thanks so much! the confession scene and the scenes preceding the sex where Yoshiko and Hanamaru reflect on different subjects each were excellent, particularly maru's, which i thought also gave insight on their relationship (and were the rest of aqours were) very smoothly.

the sex scenes worked well with the scenes preceding it, too! you seemed to be going with a light/dark-esque motif with hanamaru and yoshiko respectively, and it showed well in their bedroom behavior, while still keeping their character and not making maru too "pure" or yoshiko too "sinful" (cant think of a better way to put it). Also, i personally liked the distinction between "Yoshiko" and "Yohane".

this stands really well as a oneshot as it is, so it's fine if you dont add to it, but i'd appreciate more content from you about them because you portray their relationship really well. thanks again!

Goood, really good.
You know, not much people can write such a good lemon scene, but you did.
Every detail was perfect.
Very nice work