Nicely done! SJ

Nicely done!

this was a really interesting take on the first part of the series! thanks for the read

the sequel would be interesting with all the prior connections

Wow, I really enjoyed reading this! It's been a while since I've found a satisfying KxJ story. I really like your writing style and your characterizations of the whole gang are all spot on. The addition of those bits of KxJ made me happy. But the ending makes sense and flows nicely into canon. Looking forward to reading any future stories you may write!

Ugh I love this so much!

Ouch that hurt. But considering you based this off the beginning of everything I guess I should have seen it coming. But seriously this fic was really good, I just love your style and details, everything just flows so well and naturally it's very enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing and I hope you write more for this paring in the future!

I love this fic so much. I love the way you wrote all their characters and interactions and dialogue. My favorite scene is where they're in detention together and Joey is trying so hard to get Kaiba's attention with the notes. You did a great job of with Yugi, Joey, and Kaiba having parallel narratives for their transformation/rebirth. Yugi changes because of the Millennium Puzzle, Joey starts to grow more comfortable with expressing himself through means other than violence, and Kaiba's ascension to CEO in the end. You set up Kaiba and Joey's similarities in such a way that highlighted the juxtaposition of their "redemption" arcs. While Joey accepts it and starts working toward being a better person, Kaiba actively chooses the opposite path. Sorry for rambling. I love the way you structured their character narratives. And thank you for all the SxJ bits! It makes the diehard shipper in me happy!

This is really well written and very interesting. I hate Season 0 when Joey bullied Yugi, but hopefully they'll become friends here soon too. And I love how Kaiba kind of stood up for Joey in front of Trudge, like if anything Joey would be doing everyone a favor by beating that guy up, but I just hope he doesn't get too hurt. But this is a really good story so far and I can't wait to see what happens next!

Wow. I'm gonna need to read this again, but how lovely. Man, that last scene, Kaiba's final slamming of the door on his heart, his past- finally shifting into the armor. So chilling and sad and awesome.

Beautifully written, artfully done, I'm just in love with this piece, it made my Sunday!

Please keep writing, if you ever need encouragement send me something or drop a note!

Girl (I hope!)

This is so good! I can tell you've put a lot of thought and time into this. Kaiba slowly coming around morally (cause someone's gotta fight the bully- hey dad!) .

I love kaibas impatience with Yugi, so he stays in character "you dweeb". I love Kaiba helping Joey, but not doing him any gratuitous favors that as an author , it would be tempting to write in (oh, joeys all wet and it's cold outside? Why doesn't Kaiba just give him a ride and sneakily spend the night at Kaiba mansion? Thank you for not doing that...)

So glad you're doing such beautiful work in this fandom!

On to chappie 3...

I love this so far! The world you've created feels distinctly smaller, darker, and more realistic than the show. The characters are themselves but shifted subtly. I love all of them, so glad to see Tea back in another of your stories, I feel like she gets shorted a lot in fanfic.

I LOVED the dodgeball scene! Kaiba grinning at Joey, palming the wall, pushing off, shoes squeaking- I can hear those sounds. You do a great job painting the picture, but it's not too heavy on description (I tend to do that) your rhythm and dialogue are always well crafted.

Can't wait to read the next couple chapters!