Good ways to move the story.

Great backstory on James and Lilly

Nice set of discussions. Interesting viewpoints.

Like your changes to the plotline.

Appreciate seeing professionals take proper precautions

Reasonable.

Better calm Hagrid down.

I adore a kick-ass Amelia

Nice switch-ups to Canon characterizations. Loved the free elves (look for the union label)

Nice switch up to the usual ”brain-dead” DMLE.

Glad Harry focused on survival. In canon, he gave up (understandable). Bit it would come and go

Nice set up.

I want two children, three years apart.

Here are some bad Dumbledore nicknames I heard,

Dumble-damn
Dumb-old-dork
Bumble-Fuck
Bumble-bitch
Bumble-whore

I call him dumble-damn

The only thing to add would a little about Harry’s meeting with McGonnagal, an update on the Weasleys and Hermione, some bits with Dumbledore trying to get control of Harry again and then an idiotic end for Dumbledore, and finally a bit of romance between Harry and Susan.

Good story. Made a real good read.

A nice story but it left a lot of things unfinished. What was the real reason Dumbles wanted to control Harry? What happened to Dumbledork? Did Snape lose his magic too?

This was a fantastic story. Just that little difference of Harry asking for help and kept doing it until he got help. Well thought out.

Excellent! ~~ Snake ~~