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This is a clusterfuck of colossal proportions. It has enamored me completely.

there are no truer words than that

YEah you are a dead man. Can you skip all the whining and explaining stuff I already know.

Enough edge to cut with words. Lousy words at that. Defiantly means to oppose, fight, and/or resist. Definitely means that it is certain to happen, 100%. Also, stop capitalizing random words for 'Emphasis'. It's reducing the already low quality of your story. Start using Italics if you want emphasis and Bold letters for intensity. Start using symbols like peroids, commas, apostrophy's and stuff like that properly. Only use capital letters in the middle of the sentence when it concerns names, like I did with the previous sentence. Things like Reality Marble and reality marble, and The smile I had on my face and The Smile I had on my first sentence had capital names to signify the importance of the thing itself. The second sentence, why capitalize 'Smile'? Is it so unique that you had to give it something like a technique name? I bet you think you're a special snowflake, adding unnecessary and stupid details like that to your writing style. Why am I even wasting my time writing this? It's not like you'll read this and improve.

chapter 1 felt interesting and drew me into the story but you've falling into the trap off telling and not showing

Umm... they are concerned about the masses not the governments...
Why would the mage association and the church not involved with them? It woukd be idiotic of them if they don't control them lol...

its Prana not Parana and the Titan of time is Kronos (also spelled as Cronus) not Koronus

waifu Nyarlathotep, maybe the book of the damned is her recreation of the Necromicon, or maybe he has that as well?

Dayum, that was some serious shit, very good chapter.

"Alley himself" should be "ally himself"."Defiantly" should be "definitely"."Realty" should be "reality"."Prana of the decapitated" should be "Prana of the detained"."Structural analyzes" should be "structural analysis".
You have an annoying habit of capitalizing words that don't need it and not capitalizing words that do need it.

too much angst and self-pity for my taste, i dont even know what universe this fic on, fate zero? fate stay night? or AU? you make your MC look like OP mc but nooooooo

- Great Red or 666 ( Trihexa ) from Bible or DxD ( your choice ),
- Yakumo Yukari from Touhou ( Literal Youkai of Dimension, par of Zelretch),
- SCP Series ( Need some alteration if you want to use them),
- Deadpool from Marvel ( seriously ? ),
- Saitama from One Punch Man ( Wtf !?, but sadly He doesn't have reality hopping technique ),
- Kamijou Touma from To Aru Series ( Give him some spine to control and use his power and He certainly must be the most OP character in Anime like from certain fanfic named To Ascend by Loopsey and other fics, you will love it),
- Zeno from Dragon Ball ( ... I don't know what to say ),
- Izayoi from Problem Child Anime ( I forgot the name of that Anime),
- God from Bruce Almighty or Saint's Row ( If you can recruit them, I will make you my god ),
- Author from Fanfiction Metaverse ( I certain that you must be above zelretch as you have the Author's Authorities ),
- All character that have Dao Deity level or above from all type of certain Chinese Novel ( eventhough I hate their guts, arrogancy, and all types of sin that they excuded ( like Gilgamesh and all magi from Fate Series ), I certain that they have power to back up their loose mouths and ranks)
- Any cheat character from Japanese Novel that have cut or steal skill from their opponent ( Like certain novel named cut & paste blablabla I don't know the full title of that novel now )
- Old Gods from H.P Lovecraft ( F*** this s***, I'm out)

And that my suggestion character to rival Zelretch, just be careful in selecting one of them. Several of Them know how to mindfu** you and you character.

Maybe Merlin, despite everything, he might be the only person I can think about who can troll people while being overpowering in the Nasuverse. I mean, he still alive just in imprisoned in the tower of Avalon and he's considered a Grandcaster after Solomon the Wise in FGO.