Not a super fan of harem but still enjoyed this enough to favor it...
No real visible grammatical error, so it pass.
And fortunately enough, Yô was the protagonist and not some annoying guys. (hate oc-centered fic where the girls are competiting for the bastard .)

Aww it was so cute You-chan really did have a hard time

A humorous one shot indeed. Although I'm still waiting for the next chapter from your other story, this story had certainly made my day!

That end lmao :v It was really funny, love it