That was an amazing story! I loved so many things, especially how Ahsoka didn't kill Barriss and how the news people filmed Anain and his kids :) Amazing work!

Ps: I cried twice in this episode because of how both beautiful and sad it was. The first time when Katooni finds out the other kid is alive, and the other one at the end, during the conversation between Riyo and Magnus

This has been one of the best stories I've read in the last months. And definitely the best romance story I've read in a long while
The chemistry between Ahsoka and Riyo felt real, which is not light praise. I've read way too many stories with instant falling in love and it's refreshing to see comeone who actually puts work on developing a real relationship between the main characters.
The side characters are also fantastic, and none of them felt like they were wasting time. From all of them, my favorite was Magnus, and i also really liked your versions of Anakin and Asajj.
I think I have more to say, but it's getting very hard to say it, so, to keep this short, I really liked everything about this, and I hope the rest of your stories are as good as this one.

Not as good as your other story, but still enjoyable. Sidious taking Barriss as his actual apprentice seems kind of stupid, since she isn't that special, but I guess he had to make do with what was available, since everything was coming to a head and there was no more time.

Can we see the wedding?

This fan fiction was amazing, there seems to have been lots of detail and research gone into this and I thank you for it. One of the best I have ever seen

This was without a doubt the best romance I've read in at least two years maybe three, irrespective of fandom.

The relationships evolved at a realistic pace, none of that we're together now two chapters in out of nowhere as worse writers do.

Thank you, for the only Ahsoka story worth reading on this site!

You managed a good final for your story. It was neither too abrupt nor to long winded. There was a little bit of tension but not too much and the epilogue adds an extra layer of finished. Well done!

You've used the mind-scape very well in your story. The first few times you showed it I found it to be a waste of time. Ahsoka's conflict was well shown in the story. The encounters in the mind-scape only illustrated what was more or less obvious anyway.

This time around using the mind-scape was not a waste. Explaining Barriss' state of mind would not have worked so well since she is really beyond what a normal person could relate to. Thus illustrating it with this metaphor was a very good choice.

The pseudo proposal was really ... cute! I can hardly believe you did not plan it.

The fight was pretty good. I did not notice this chapter was actually longer than the others. Maybe you could have pronounced the light and the sounds of the lightsabers a little bit more. The way you described the fight one could almost forget they used lightsabers.

The fall to the dark side of the force is very well done. It is amazingly believable. And you made it possible to refer to her problems. The way you depicted the Jedi actually made their actions questionable as well which makes the fall even more understandable. I especially like how you wrote scenes we have seen before, only from other perspectives.

The visions were really good.

I like the way this story unfolds. Riyo is the right choice to realize the feelings. I'm curious what you'll let her do about them though.

A very nice start. I liked how Ahsoka put her foot in her mouth the most.

You've made up a good depiction of what being a senator in StarWars could be about. I got the feeling Chuchi actually has a job - something I miss in a lot of stories. You could have gone into a bit detail about what Ahsoka did too. For most of the chapter, it felt like she was lounging around doing exactly nothing. You kind of corrected that close to the end.

Very well done!

Gay Ahsoka? SIGN ME UP! :D Well-written, too. Thanks for sharing!