i love history. please don't stop updating .
A last recommendation would be to separate the texts, since it is a bit annoying to read paragraphs with dialogues and other things too close together. keep it up crack.

I hope this story continues. Well done on the chapter please update at your earliest convenes

New updates when ?

For the love of the Omnissiah, please divide this into paragraphs.

Post Note: I like this story and its progress. Archmagos flexing on the primitives is entertaining.

Not often that you see a solely Mechanicus fic. The chapter is fine as it is now, but in my opinion it could use a rewrite.

This sounds like it will be a good story. It combines two fascinating settings in a plausible manner, and has a lot of potential. I could see the MAgos working to unite Remnant under a single government, to annihilate the Grimm, and perhaps to renew contact with Mars so this world can be settled. I'm curious as to how he'll handle Faunus - hopefully they're classified as Abhumans rather than Mutants, because then they'd have the right to keep existing and living their lives.

Having said my praises, I do have some critiques. Corius didn't once mention the Machine God or the Omnissiah, despite the Imperium being a society in which religion is interwoven. I also found it out of character that he referred to himself as no longer being human, since the Techpriests are as human-supremacist as the Imperial Cult.

Anyway, I'll be sure to read more.

Consider not using block text man. It's a hassle to read on this site. Also putting your dialogue in giant blocks of text makes it hard to pick out because most people will just start skimming it instead of reading it when they see all the giant blocks of text. Other than that the only other thing I've noticed that could be improved on right now is a few grammar and punctuation errors although they are minor.

cool story bro going into my favorites

Well, I have another Idea... Imperator Class Titan... With the Machine Spirit Being in Full Control.

I just want to thank you for continuing this story. Aside from the spelling and grammatical errors, it's a great read.

As you say, I don't like it. So, I won't read it.

I don't like it not because it's something I would normally dislike, I don't like it because you've only got an elementary school level of writing.

Get a beta reader to help you parse through these blocks and put them into something more readable.

Break up paragraphs where more than one person talks.

Describe what's happening in more detail.

Cool premise, bad execution.

This is basically unreadable.

It's like a timeline peppered with summaries.

Words can not describe how happy I am to see that you are still working on this! Lingua Technis might, but who knows. I am curious on where you plan to take this story. Take as long as you need for the next chapter.

great job buddy

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