I'm starting to think you're dead

This was really interesting! Poor Felecity though, I don't think I could handle being two places at once. I'd probably just cry tbh XD

Damn omg that last part of the chapter was such a mind game ;; now I clearly know how Felicity is feeling. Must be frustrating to only understand blurs of different languages. Has that ever happened to you, by any chance? Bc the way you wrote it felt so real, as if you e actually experienced it more than enough.

There was one part of the chapter that seemed quite repetitive. I remember you writing “On the other side of the Gate, on the other hand...” and then the next paragraph started with “On the other side of the Gate” again. That seems repetitive. Probably take that obrade out in the next para?

Oh my gosh, my brain hurt. . I can understand very well how confusing everything is for poor Felicity. She's doing pretty good, to be honest, despite lots of awkward pauses catching up to what's going on. Good job with showing this in the chapter, because I don't think I would've been able to figure out how to write this myself. XD

I absolutely adore this concept, especially reading it through Felicity’s perspective because you’re jumping between two completely different conversations (which is hard enough to follow without the multiple languages), and by the end of the chapter you feel the exhaustion and irritation that Felicity is feeling in that moment. Luckily for me, I was able to go back and re-read each conversation separately. I’m really excited to see the direction this story is going to go.

Great job as always!

-LB

I was worried that I wouldn’t remember the exact details of this fic (since I haven’t t ad it in so long) but it was pleasantly surprised to find that I still remembered the major ideas and concepts from the past fic. I really liked this chapter and am lookin forward to the next no matter how long it takes!

I ate food at a Transylvanian food truck once. It was good. :3 THE EXCITE IS REAL!

Hey, I don't care when chapters show up as long as they show up! And bruh, you're still doing better than me.

I'm really hoping you'll give some real good feels of Alfons bonding with Ed and Felicity. Hurt my soul, please and thank you. ;u;

Oh my gosh. Sorry for the one word review on the last story, I was sort of speechless. You have no idea how much I love this. Like, staying up till two am two nights in a row and reading as soon as I wake up kinda love. Like fangirling and wishing my younger sister has seen either Fullmetal Alchemist so I could explain what is going on to her kinda love. Seriously. The ending made me cry. Legit irl cry. Followed by weird looks from aforementioned sister. The sequel sounds like it will be just as good, possibly better (OK that is a little bit of a stretch, though if you manage to make this better than the last I will die (and be content)).
Your Newest Fan,
~Jayla Fire Gal

'You look like my late brother' that sounds so bad. Oh my god

This is nice, I like it

I really love how your wrote this chapter! It flows well! You've def improved x3

I wonder what would happen now Feli's living with Ed. They seem like cute siblings lmao. But poor Feli tho :c I can tell this has been really taking a toll on her.

Yay Alfons! I can't wait to see what will happen next!

Ed having a mental breakdown over calling someone short. Oh, my Lord XD Isn't it much more likely that Alfons has tuberculosis, though?

How did Ed braid his hair with one hand, or is it just going to be a mystery.

I had a character based off myself that then ended up going kinda canon-divergent from... real life? And the whole story was written from 3rd person... Yeah, it sometimes felt really weird to write about that character.

So that's what happened... Man, the Gate just HAD to drop her off somewhere really inconvenient, like on another transmutation circle... Wait, this means she jumped universes 3 times, right? She's getting to Elric levels of going to/from the Gate!

At least Felicity knows CoS Alphonse can relate to her about being a teenager in a younger body. ...Well, once he gains his memory back, at least.

I had found some info about Alfon's condition. The wikia page for FMA had gotten their source of knowledge of Alfon's illness off of a fan translated guidebook which had said that his illness was lung cancer and that it was caused by the inhalation of rocket fumes. Also, depending on where and the time they were living (which is a more historical city environment, early 1920's and pre-holocaust), the air may have been more polluted because of smog from trains, boats, factories, and cars.

Okay, so I really loved this chapter! I was a bit confused at the beginning but I think that was the point. I love how you have incorporated all of the series together! I can't wait to read the next chapter!