Creepy. I like it. It's awesome, in a chilling kind of way. And it's so Rachel - the way she gets this combination of thrilling excitement and horror from battle. I really like it.

'haunts', 'soul', and 'eternity' have a tendency to suggest cliche, *especially* when used together. Please carefully consider their use. Apart from that, a chilling, excellent poem.

I used to love Animorphs. Can we say ob-sess-ion? It just got a little to anguishy for me and this is the exact same thing. But it makes sense. Who can kill like that and not go crazy? It's like the whole Irvine thing. Ass-ass-i-na-tion. BANGKa-ching $_$

*shivers though it's summertime* geez, how depressing... good, though.

Very deep, I like it! She seems to see it form all perspectives, not only that she bleeds but that she causes others to bleed! _ Love it!

I really like this poem that you made. It sounds a lot like Rachel is about to go kill some Hork-Bajir and Taxxon butt! You should do this kind of stuff more often! I give it an absolute 10!

Marilyn ()

That's a poem?...maybe the formatting is wrong...

That's actually rather good. I think, if you sat down and made it longer, it could be a top class poem. But right now it's too short to be as good as it should be.