Wow really love the story so fare! Also question will you have any of the RWBY badys in this fic like Cinder,Romen, or Tyrian?
Ether way great fic and keep up the good work!

I like the basis, the Armax Arena gladiator fight, but I'm not sure that they would fight to the death in a Corporation-sponsored tournament. The characters seemed cool, but I haven't seen Ruby (forgive me if I get the show's name wrong) so I couldn't really help you much there. I feel that you need to differentiate between who is thinking more often, for example in one segment Rubes is saying something, and then right afterward the fighter is thinking to herself. That was a big kicker for me throughout the whole piece, the breaks between scenes definitely need work. Going from the sisters talking on the balcony to the action in the ring needs to be more concrete so people know what's going on. Also, at some points there were a lot of information dumped in, like the Krogan race description. Those could've been paraphrased to keep the action moving. You write the dialogue very well, but the setting writing needs work. Thanks a lot for sharing! It was fun to read and critique.