I really like what you did here. When do you think you will do the advertised story with Gastorinis? And do you think you could retype this with better grammar and spelling? I sense you have a lot of potential when it comes to this sort of thing. Keep up the good work!

thanks for the support

Good start, but please check your grammar (used tow instead of two).

Also, try to differentiate between narration, regular text and speaking. Otherwise things get confusing.