Great story my friend. By the way, please reply to my PM, I wouldn't mind if you say no

OwO do I see some Pokemon the movie 2000 arc here?

Story is lagging dude

I don't fancy the zir idea. But other than that it is great. I hope you continue to work on it.

Hmm

Damn, was hoping for an update. Oh well, I'll wait.

Man your writing skills way to good you should really become a writer the way you describe things really is amazing you can be a really famous writer dude you way of writing is refreshing keep up the good work

Your story started good but your are making it way more complicated than it has to be...but still...good work...keep it up

... Why the hell did you think it was a good idea to start saying zir and zie instead of it and they? That makes no sense. That just ruins the consistency of your writing.

The link didn't go through right in my last review. Here it is again.

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This video is my reaction towards both the last chapter and this chapter. Type it in the search bar without parenthesis.

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I'm glad someone is there for Ash, but Serena is really fucking pushy in this story. When you think about all she's done and the fact that Ash constantly rejects her moves on him yet she continues to pester him, it gets rather overwhelming. It's passed the line of compassion and is now borderline stalking. I feel bad for him.

Good chapter albeit I'm a bit confused as to what happened eojbserena and well the kid from Kalos as well.

umm why does it keep saying zei or zir when ever you reference tyranitar instead of just saying it?

Yay it’s finally June! Good luck on the new chaps lol