Have you ever thought of posting this to Spacebattles?

: / /

You really should, because your fic's great!:):):)

Update this plz I don’t know why you haven’t but awesome stories like this demand to be written

If you do update this fic since I think its really well written that Taylor should go to soltheim and pick up the albino spider eggs like the frost bite spider and take them back to Skyrim to breed. Since albino spiders can be weaponized with different magic by the type of gem they nest by or the machine in the something white barrow and take her pets to black reach and let them grow next to the geodes down there since they are soul gems and a special spider is made from soul gems and since black reach is connected to dwemer ruins she can also get another special spider. Mind control and oil spiders respectively. Then go to that other spider castle in Skyrim and get her frost bites some magic power as well and start an army to take it over. Also she can control all insect ingredients in alchemy and make some serious gold as well.

This idea has promise. Given the sandboxy nature of Skyrim, I would expect that the story will end up focusing less on the various quests and more on the characters' interactions throughout.
Updaaaate...

Ok, my only problem with this chapter is that you called the hunting bow she got from Faendal a scoped hunting bow. IIRC, you can't get any sort of scope in the game, but you could just change it so that she instead recieves a "finely crafted" hunting bow.

An interesting story so far, hope that it doesn't turn out be one of those ideas that never gets finished.

The loot sense bit was really hilarious.

Still terrifying people even in other dimensions.

I like how she is adapting. Are there any issues that she is having, culturally or in wilderness survival? Is she having any blatant 'what the heck?' moments about all of this?

This seems like a really cool story concept.

*cackling* ok this is great and I need more. Bit of advice though, it's ok to skim over the mook fights and looting with a generic "we made our way through the cave killing badies as we went and gathering a small amount of loot."

Less tedious in the long run. That or you have to commit to the whole thing and focus on rising tension and close calls mid fight. Which could be better but is tedious in its own way if you do it to often.

Also you've established the setting, now it would be good to work on building up your characters. After all if Taylor's going to be palling around with the dragon born we need to know more about her, not neccesarily her past, at least not yet but personality maybe some quirks of hers, stuff like that. Get the two of them talking and interacting a bit. Maybe they stop at an in and there is that awkward moment where the owner asks if they want one room or two? Or Taylor gets confronted with beer which tastes like piss spittake ensues and her companion finds it funny? Things like that.

Anyway great start looking forward to more!

Loot Sense. Heh heh.

poor spider

Nice job on this chapter!

He was destined to be a great bandit lord... then he took an arrow to the knee. :P

Nice introductory fight scene for Taylor, curious to see how she and Zariel end up getting along.