I love this
All the mystery is thrillin

Hey!
I really, really like this story. Is it still ongoing or is it discontinued though? - you haven't updated in ages, but I love the story, I really like your way of thinking and the plot's quite interesting too. It would be really sad if you'd abandoned the story, you know?
Well, anyways. Hope it's not. Cause I really, really like it. But I already said that. So ... Nothing left to say. Have a great day!

I finished reading this, and I want to read more, no pressure though.
Your writing is nice to read. I saw some typos here and there, soemtimes it wasnt clear what was going on but nothing dramatic. The reading flow was there.

Between all ASL/Whitebeard stories Ive read so far, this is one of the most original.
I mean, there is a plot. Thats amazing.
Most ASL stories are living of fluff and drama. Yours has drama, mystery, action and a drving force behind the story. Time is running here. There are things to get done, you know? A sense of urgency that makes it alive.
I really wonder what they did to Luffy. Leviathan is a word that I know from the bible and Thomas Hobbes. But Luffys condition doesnt seem to make him strong, he seems more sick than anything. And, how does the devil fruit serum play into this? Argh. I dont know but I want to know.

On this note: Sabo seems to know quite alot, huh.
Making him so different from the orginal made me a bit sceptical at first but I love this version.
It seems like that Ace and Sabo have different ways to ensure Luffys safety.
While Ace offers Luffy his love and his fighting abilities, Sabo has a much smarter approach. He gatheres informations and has the ability to manipulate the players on the field, and get what he wants (most times). He also does the dirty work because, I suppose, someone has to do it.
I bet Luffy would be dead already if it werent for Sabo.
(The scene where Sabo sees the similarities between Luffy and Ace, black hair and similar eyes, and thinks about how they could pass as siblings while he couldnt kinda broke my heart).

Anyways, great story!

Amazing story.

Please update soon.

Good chapter and please keep updating this amazing one piece story and I hope that there be more one piece stories like Time Travel with Luffy and Strawhat crew saving ace and Whitebeard or keeping ace and Whitebeard alive?.
Female Luffy pregnant with ace's child ? or Luffy's lost twin sister that ace and Sabo and straw hat crew doesn't know about it?. Ace and female characters lemon one- shots and Luffy and female characters lemon one - shots ? or Ace and Harem and Luffy Harem?. Luffy meets his mother?. Strong/ smart luffy and ace and Sabo with 2 devil fruits for each other ? and what if Makino carrying Shank's child ? And please update soon.

Please update soon

I love the way you portray Garp using the fact that he can annoy people to his advantage. 10/10 job!

oh this is good, i need to know more about the experiment please

Oh! So exciting~

When will ace and Sabo find out Luffy is starting to get his coughing fits again!? Soon?
I hope so! I love Your story! I can't wait for more!
Pleaz update soon!

I assume that Sabo is the most dangerous of the three. Too much of a risk taker and wary of the world that it breaks my heart. Wonder what made him like that...

I really like this. Please continue!

update soon plz x

Can't wait to see what happens next!

Your back!

heheheh cant wait for sabo to shove a stick up blackbeards asss
and he didnt actually make the promise, did he