MORE!

it was cute, though you kept forgetting to put the ' in the right places, or forgetting to put the other one.

like in this one you forgot to put the other one:

'What was that?, Sirius asked, slightly more awake.

in this one you put them wrong:

'Okay, Harry said'.

the way you put it made it sound like harry said "harry said".

still liked the story though. :)