1st chapter in and I'm already interested. Keep up the good work

Very interesting 1st chapter. Keep up the good work

wow 1st chapter in and I'm already interested in it. keep up the good work and take care

amazing

It says Gary instead of Gray, but I don't mean to be rude. It's where they find her.

Great chapter!
It's a very good si-oc fanfic, I love it.
I look forward to reading more.

so cool

Stop writing this type of Cliche stories, when you write 80k words and you only have 60 or so follows you know there is something wrong. And that summary is actually really stupid if you do not know how to write one just copy and paste something from one of your chapters, just adding that bit of "Sorry but I'm bad ..." makes this 10x times worse.

But doesn’t she know that Deliora is already dead?!

Hello I’m just letting you know that your story is doing that thing we’re its in code format.
p class"p1"span class"s1"Mortis walked through the streets feeling exhausted. Not from using all her energy from the mission she had just been on, but from trying to stop Natsu and Grab form fighting each other and preventing them from destroying the class"Apple-converted-space" /span/span/p
Also I love this story! Can’t wait for more! :p

Well i have to admit this is more interesting than I thought it would be, there's a few things that bug me though.
First of all, you need to space thing's out, if you have dialogue between characters, then it shouldn't be in the same paragraph.
And two i don't know if i wanna get any more in to this, because it's a little bit over two years old and that bothers me because you're not that far in to the story after two years
Other then that it's a great story, hope you can get more chapters out.

Hello. I wanted to say good luck in your story.

First of all, I think you should re space your writing. When creating dialogue, it's usually a good idea to space things in between like

Person 1: "I am speaking right now"

Person 2: "When a different person is speaking you place it in the next paragraph not in the same one. It's awkward to read a paragraph of dialogue and you don't see it in man other books for a reason."

I think you also need some work on your pacing, it moves rather quickly from Igneel to Lyon to Natsu. I also think there shouldn't be so much focus on the magic and more on your MC's personality and character than learning magic.

Yay! :) new chapter, love this story. Keep it up, can't wait to see what happens next. :)

I must say I am loving this sooo much and I can't wait to see what you'll so next xD

Great thus far, imaginative and well written. I cant wait until you get well into the plot line, i am looking forward to arcs such as the S-class trials and how she will act on the island (assuming and really hoping she is there for it). Hope you are having as much fun writing this as i am reading it.