Very good story really caught me from the beginning and I would love you to continue it
You can tell that you are very good at it and I can tell you from the depths of my heart that I enjoy each chapter

It's a good foundation, a good outline, but there are so many holes to fill. It's a bit too cliche that he is the heir/head of all those houses and is uber wealthy and just throwing money around.

Also, did he really just get a history of his family from this guy, hear about his grandfather and that this guy was a friend of his father from school, and then not even ask the man's name? Seriously?

I see you abandoned this story, but if you ever pick it up and write again, you need to do better than this.

what fic are people reading here? this is terrible.

I am sorry that you are discontinuing this story, as it is one of my favourites. Do you know of any similar stories to this one that I could read? Well done for writing such a good story.

Don't start to write something and leave us hanging it was just started to get good!

There is alot of information left out in the 1st few chapters. Also what is with the rush? Rewrite it better

It was a good story, don't be a runaway and finish it!

I have to agree with the other readers, this is a great story and its a shame it should end up in the stack of "Great stories left unfinished." I am not a writer and would never suffer otbers to read my pathetic attempts at story telling so I read for enjoymen and praise each authour for the job well done. This is all said as " my observations" nothing more. Someone said put it up for adoption and its a great idea. I look forward to reading more of your work and again this is all not said to hack you off, but my own opinion. Wishing you well in your writing endeavours.

Of course it is. If it's not that meek, pansy, spineless Harry then it's trashed.

Gosh darn it. Finally find an outstanding story on this board only to find out you stop writing it.

too bad

I had fun

I do enjoy this story and the other one you mentioned. If you ever pick this one up I will be happy to read it

I am disappointed

And after this notmd i will def. Not read anymore of your stories. Thanks for the wasted timd. Please take your practice run not online. Its good writing. But what you did is a no go

Sorry but then tell us before that you never finish it. I am angry cause i invested time to read this storx. At leasj give upfor adoption.