Well.. this is gold, love this story, the characters are believable, the back ground setting is really good and you managed to build up the world of gems even more then before.
Small criticism :
I am not saying that the inner turmoil of peridot was done bad but it could have been a lot better, it just that she comes as being both loyal a.k.a. she believes in what the diamonds are trying to achieve but she doesn't even try to talk Mist out of joining the rebellion, comes a cross a little bit contrary to her character as a hole.
But all in all I really like this story. Keep up good work

I do appreciate a good story from Homeworld's perspective keep up the good writing.

Well, I am actually shocked to find something of this quality on this Web site, it is written amazingly. No joke, it really good. I am intreaged to find out where all of this is heading. Is this like sub story of the main show or are you going to mix it with the present day story ( like Steven and the the gang or are you going to keep it in the past) Anyway good job so far will hope to see more :)