Another villain is redeemed. I enjoyed this one. Nice work.

This is great! Poor Clover doesn't seem to have found her perfect guy.

I have to admit that the people that I felt should be released from WOOHP were the right ones. Outstanding job overall! 10/10

This was an interesting start. Looking forward to chapter 2.

Interesting chapter this one, looking at the reforming of three former villains and how the girls have helped them get their lives back on track. You've really given Sam, Clover and Alex some new depth in your stories in the way they help to give their former enemies a chance at redemption. Well done! :)

Boy, poor Clover is having a real problem with getting herself a straightforward relationship, isn't she? Nice that her friends are there to support and comfort her. Nice touching start for this story.

I got one sentence into the story and laughed something about the image of those three girls waving to a guard was so funny to me. On another note, I see that you did fix that whole said thing.

One tiny thing is that sometime the dialogue can come off as a exposition heavy, it felt like we were getting a status update sometimes on where some of the characters would be. Take for instance when susan explains her backstory that part comes out of nowhere while also being totally unprompted. A quick fix might have been to have alex ask her where she got her stuff from.

Though a positive is that I really did not feel like I could trust susan. She comes off as likable, but it almost comes off as too likable. Since we don't really know who she is you can really play it any way you want.

Okay, I just finished chapter one and I had some thoughts.

Firstly the girls voices were excellently done. I felt like each of them were in character.

Secondly, there were number of times when you'd over explain when you could imply what's been happening. For example: "They kept in touch via phone and email due to gratitude and mutual affection"

This is really unnecessary is because everything in this scene could be guessed by context. You already set up that clover had his number, the writing later on about dating implies a romantic interest in clover, and the gratitude is a given because the rescuing.

It's not deal braking, but try to remember that your audience is smart enough to fill in these blank spots.

The only other thing I'd say as a negative was the uses of other words for said. I know that teachers kept forcing kids to never over use the word said, but they're wrong. Most of the time you don't even realize how many times the word said has been used. There is nothing wrong with using different words instead of said, but it sometimes can come off like the writer is trying to show how many words they know instead of telling a story.

Overall it was a fun fast pace story. I liked Clover in this, you do a great job showing her jealousy towards the other girls' relationships without driving the point home.

Interesting perspective on FanGirl... she loves spies, so being in a prison where everybody hates them is hard for her. Yes, considering her admiration for spies and tech skills, she could easily change her ways and become a valuable asset.

Nice to see other redeemed villains too.

You mentioned that we should feel free to contact you with ideas. I have one idea that could be interesting. Tim Scam begs for a second chance and tries to romance Sam (Of course in my mind he would be faking it - one of the 'redeemed villains' that backfires on the Spies)

Interesting point on the girls' dating life. It makes sense that it would work better with boyfriends who are also involved in the hero/spy bussiness instead of regular guys.

Unfortunately, it seems things didn't work out for Clover, but I'm sure she will find another suitor soon enough.

The next candidate for the redemption tour is FanGirl, huh? Let's see if she truly is redeemed or if she's just playing tricks

It was nice to see Susan actually care about the crimes she committed and feel sorry and understand what she did was bad. It was good to see the girls could be forgiving. Hopefully Stacey and Brick are as good as they seem. That was a fun chapter and a good story.

I like the relationship between Clover and Kip. The back story of the kidnapper who actually took reasonably good care of her captives, was an interesting take. Three meals a day, a shower, opportunity to work out. Sounds like the makings of a redeemable villain. It should be interesting to find out what happens when they talk to her. Good chapter.

Another nice redemption story. You will have to do one where one of those redeemed returns to their former ways...

Very cool.

Loved it.