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EDIT: my bad, you actully hinted YOU would dance on the stripper pole, my apologies, but it is still messed up considering the K rating

Listen dude, i appreciate that you are trying to make a fan-fiction to counter all the... as you say "hateful" fan-fictions, but this is not the way to do it.

For starters, you are a hypocrite

you say that this fan-fiction is to counter the fan-fictions with sex, and inappropriate language, and yet you use words like "Dammit" and even hinted that Laa-Laa was going to dance on a stripper pole on a certain chapter, and whats worse you did all that adding the K rating!

Also, Self-insert fan-fictions are just straight up bad, Why? because the self-insert is most likely to be praised, comforted, and overpowered, which is what you do here, even just for eating by yourself the characters all felt bad, you even are literally called a "Superhuman"

and no, you getting hugged in pain does not make it any better, its just you using the same joke over and over, the only "jokes" that you use is being crushed by hugs and freaking out and running into hard objects and blaming newton's third law (and that is not how the law works)

you adding new teletubbies was a nice twist, but you pointlessly gave them names and "groups" even though their all 16 of them were all walking together, and you just called them "the blue one" or "the white one".

and that "evil narrator" from the start made no sense, where did he come from? how could the other narrator banish him? i don't know, because he is rarely spoke of for the rest of the fan-fiction.

and your relationship with the teletubbies is extremely questionable, one minute you are praising them as your friends, the next you are hiding from them, which is it?

see, to make a story, you need to have a plan, otherwise events happen so sudden that they make no sense, like the portal reopening for example.

I can't believe this exists.

i love it.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE I LOOOOOOVE THE TELETUBBIES SOOOO MUCH!

Wow u actually took the time to do this Pete :