good story to read and wonder how the fight will go with naga. it will be fun to read new chapters.

Does he have to explain his techniques to his enemies? I mean can't he just think about it?

The harem for the OC is getting too big. At this point I have to question the girls' self esteem if they're ok with the OC being with so many other females.

Seems like a decent story so far, but there is an insane amount of repetition in your sentence structure. Here's an example,
"Zenki had a bitter taste in his mouth at the words of Sairaorg Bael, leaving a bitter taste in his mouth."
I love dxd fics where they actually start out as devil's that leaves a lot of room for world building.

I remember why I was getting turned off by this story long ago I hate when authors give issei big as harems ughhh I hate issei so much

The story looks like it will be good but the bad grammar and spelling has somewhat ruined it for me. I'm not going to continue reading this story but other people might like it, good luck.

Update

Honestly pretty good writing. I personally think the dialogue has a lot of room for improvement. I actually started skimming the dialogue instead of reading it. My advice to you is to read the interactions out loud and see if it makes sense to you... Also, where the hecks the plot. Its literally just porn without actual sex. Also, how many freaking girls are you gonna put in the harem lol.

No Oc can ever replace Ise ;c. All OCs are lousy. Well I must say your is one of the best written OCs but can never come near Ise. Dont know why so many do OC when they have a perfect MC. Maybe they are scared they cant do as good as ichiei or they dont want it. But its really starts to annoy that all use OC and not the True Mc of the Story itself.

And that marks my third story finished, can't wait for these to get updated. Keep up the great work

Fuck. I can't believe I actually read so much of this garbage. A few hours of life wasted. Gg

Shit fic retarded MC loves whining to his dad but doesn't take care of the problem permanently himself

Slighter better than the last one, at least this MC isn't acting like a cutesy little bitch every single moment

Zenki should get yasaka in his harem

It was sénior dildo! That creep!