GRDNs: "The Strength Of The Pack Is The Wolf, And The Strength Of The Wolf Is The Pack."

Well done! Congratulations on an intriguing story. Well written, with only a few grammar errors here and there, that will need a very close read-through to be caught. But well done, overall.

You've tweaked the canon a bit, changing things here and there, but nothing that (so far) really will put the story off the canon trail. And you've filled in a few things here and there that the anime didn't cover - and done well in the process. I look forward to a continuation of this story.

PROSCreative way of making Scenarios
-Great use of OCs (A slap for other gate fics out there) CONSSlow Pace (which is understandable because the anime is quite slow in my opinion) REMARKS:
Despite of the minor flaw of this fic. Im rooting for this great piece of work.
keep up the good work

This review will be short and sweet.

Two groups of people none would expect to interact with each other ended up doing so. You mentioned the combination of arcs, I think that is a sub-combination, different arcs coming to one. In ways indirectly leading to the bigger picture.

I don't recall Lt. Bowman that much so it might be important to make him a more impactful person. Kuwahara's presentation leads him to be a far more round character than in the canon and likewise defines the close family-like relationship of the Third Recon Team.

The Wiki-like summary I feel seems to also show fascination of the SR by the outside world and may be something for those who want to write about Historians to use.

I binged read this last night when I felt the urge to search for GATE fics. Was not disappointed and especially ecstatic when I found out it updated just a few hours ago.

Im liking how you guys are retelling the story. I liked the original myself, but this has a more war-like feel and view to it. I liked how you guys are not holding back on the gore and the helplessness the characters experience really reaches me.

I do hope to read more about Kuribayashi (my fav character lol) and how she copes with her brother's death and being deployed in the special region. And see her interact with Mari too!

Please excuse my long review. I bid you good luck with everything!

Great chapter! So far, I am enjoying the change to the story.

I like this chapter. Is a very realistic and different view of the Italica incident, and also the reasons and process to approach the city are different. As observation team, Recon 3 and Deep Recon 3 would mainly try to stay aside, but surely they get involve in one way or another.

This was RedSS, and this is my review.

i also like what your doing with lelei she is going place changing the world she is the brightest character in the series i wonder what she would create fusing her magic with science becoming a force to be reckoned with

wonder how you will introduce rory to third recon she got nearly 1000 years of history and a relationship with the divine another story "laws of emroy" tried to explore the nature of gods and rory's history and her relationship with itami

This is a great fic! It's a nice breeze grill all these "lets put a butt ton of OCs in and take away all focus from the original gang" fics out there. And plus the Third Recon deserved a better backstory. I like the edits you've made so far and look forward to what comes next.
May the Force of the Lord God almighty be with you always!
UCCMaster

Second review in the course of two days. This one should be interesting to you.

In the last chapter, you make the mistake of calling the USAF - United States Armed Forces for the United States Air Force, which is confusing because they use the same moniker. To clean this up, I recommend making the change of the American troops to designation, USFJ. The United States Forces Japan which is less confusing and reinforces the Japanese-centrist goal of the mission at hand. The United States is in the Gate as a secondary, advising and supporting role - rather than coming in as the main combatant.

Giselle is introduced early on as a main antagonist, though, her scene was short. Interesting set up. I liked the last two chapters that explored the lives of commoners and serfs in great contrast to that of the Empire and the Special Region Task Force.

Later down the line, I recommend adding a scene that precedes Pina's arrival in Italica, to show that rumors and whispers of the JSDF in Falmart is happening and explores that the lives of the privileged and actual citizens of the Empire live during war time. It's a juxtaposition to how modern warfare as we know it, is waged. The battles are miles away, without us being able to see them occur and disconnected from the death and terror. How does Roman society where news is slow and travels by horseback?

What is it like to live in a society where knowledge is not instantaneous.

I find it interesting that Lelei's teacher is doubtful of the newcomers when he himself is a mage, and explained magic as if it were a science. Knowledge and concepts are all you need to make something impossible possible. Yet, he doubts the capabilities of modern science - a civilization from a different world with different capabilities is not required to follow the rules of their world. Magic and Alchemy should promote an open mind, just as science has done the same thing in our world. Then again, some scientists deny the existence of an omnipotent being because science cannot confirm nor deny such an existence, so - it really depends on the individual.

Maybe you should look into writing some philosophical debates through the development of this story. Despotism versus Democracy. Market economy versus socialist capitalism. Magic versus science. I don't know but if you're interested in that kind of cultural exchange, that could be a cool rendition of the different civilization clashes, like everyone keeps writing scenes where Pina gets a look into world history or going so far to show Pina the capabilities of nuclear weapons.

I think, from reading this story overall, that one of Gate's rare strengths - if this anime/manga could have gone from a shitty nationalist power fantasy with magic and harems. It is the Third Recon Team concept; that a group of soldiers from another world travel long distances from home just re-coning the land and culture of the world they are not familiar with. It's far stronger a story than that of what we got, being a harem and power fantasy of an author with ultra nationalistic views.

Hell, the exploration themes in this story you got could be taken to far flung reaches instead of following the standard formula. Star Trek is by far the most famous exploration-type television show that was truly episodic. The world is large, experiencing an unknown world could be an arc about the greater universe of the Gate. I'm not saying you have to do it, but, emphasizing the exploratory themes and expand on the strengths and relationships in the Third Recon.

With their armored vehicles being their Enterprise or their Pina, Nina, and Santa Maria. This small band of Japanese soldiers, worlds away from home and miles away from modern society, they are their own family with only themselves to rely on. There is potential here to make a truly episodic story that focuses on exploration and discovery, rather than just the cost of war. Themes of family do seem to be a major factor in your story, it would be cool if you expanded on it in this way, or another.

Well, shit. You killed off the population of Coda, that sucks. I was reading into this and I noted more and more, the sense of this chapter felt like an RPG. Major character appears, dialogue ensues, character disappears into forest till the next encounter.

I think this chapter was straight forward. Your removal of the elf village makes things a little easier overall. No need to get bogged down by a mental ward - though, I would appreciate not having Lelei turn into Tuka. Tuka's already been long overused as a character at this point. Too much of a unnecessary character.

Also, this last chapter excerpt was way too short for Itami to write a report in two hours. That's barely three hundred words. Plus, it lacks the details of the mission just a dry summary. I would recommend coming back to it and just snipping a couple of detailed paragraphs from his imagine report to show that his work was a little more detailed.

What I find interesting though is that so far, there hasn't been a reason to fire a shot since Arnus was taken. Impressive way of going forward, but, really the sky is the limit at this point. You can take the story anywhere you want from here. Good luck.

Hey Snake. I'm here to lay down a couple of reviews - hopefully this is helpful and is critical enough for you.

Where is Shino's sister? While the Kuribayashi family in this story claims she had a brother - and for the plot, I agree you did his introduction as a plot device as a wonderful addition. You missed her sister Nanami; she was the female reporter from the anime and was somewhat important in helping counteract the CIA operation in Tokyo. I'll let you decide how you want to explore things but, given canon - it would be nice to see some of the lesser identified details making their way into a restructure and re-imagining of canon fiction.

I find your end-of-chapter excerpts to be intriguing, even brilliant. I have concerns that the articles have too many pieces of the puzzle. There isn't enough of a disconnect between the military and civilian aspects of the story besides sidelined mentions of anti-war protestors and the families and survivors.

I like your introduction of the families and your decision to give Itami a command before the events of Arnus Hill - it makes sense, its logical. Their relationship through the unit is believable and tangible.

Intro to Force Recon was interesting, I liked it. Reminds me of PT... Also, an aspect that much of the Gate community fails to account for is training. You got it down to a science.

Shino's darkness is...not healthy, but, no story is good without its conflict. Plus, the flip flop of her character makes her more connective.

Risa and Itami...what can we expect in the future from that? Or even Itami's relation with his unit. Good questions to ask. Also, my concerns on how the older chapters were released but its not a big deal - too tired to dig further right now. Take care. I'm at the end of the first arc at the point of this review.

Aye lad.

Excellent chapter once again. This time we look are given a shale of what this is really going to be about not only in terms of character differences but also the sentimental behaviour that is collectively shared by tragedy. We are also shown that Rory is perhaps more of a grey character that has questionable motives at hand in which the JSDF is weary off showing the great caution that should've been in place in the Canon with a semi deity. Likewise it's a rework of the Japanese perspective (and focused on that perspective) of the typical US Japan fanfics hence adding more depth and uniqueness that is missed in the canon and in many fanfics.

Well, if you wanted to tell a good story, you and your co-writer are doing it goddamm good. ON THE CHAPTER!

This was the fall of Coda, possibly Cato, and the appareance of Rory. With a power unknowed to the Task Force, they now must prepare to face this new threat called "Fire Dragon". How will they do that? Must keep reading to know it.

Nothing more to say about the chapter, good as always. Hope to read you soon.

RedSS.

Darn, things going grim dark here, more than canon though.