Hello good sir,
This is one of the best Naruto cross ever written, plz continue it.

I am not surprised and I do not care that Ultear acts like a whore, but it was necessary to destroy all the character construction that Naruto showed ?, As Naruto step of wanting to go unnoticed, be cautious, careful and gradually get real friends, to get together and trust a woman who generates mistrust on all sides, whom he hardly knows and who also harasses him ?, the last three chapters went to hell with how forced, contradictory and meaningless they were. I really loved the story but those last three chapters leave a lot to be desired, Naruto seems stupid who forgot everything he had learned at home and in that new place, now he was just a guy who does what you want just for sex, is it serious?!, and the Naruto x Lucy couple had been building very well and you are sending it to hell! By what author?! Why?!, I am sorry that gave me a lot courage, well, regards friend.

This was definitively one of the best Fairy Tail x Naruto fics I’ve ever read to be honest. It really was a phenomenal read and it felt like I was immersed in it throughout. I will say though, once they hit the nightmare room, the story kind of falls apart everywhere.

Everything felt rushed, I don’t know if it was me but it felt like everything turned super vague and wasn’t really comprehensible, especially when he went to Ultear for help with the room. Naruto also immediately turned out of character out of nowhere as well. I get the re-emergence of Zetsu would leave him panicked/angry but it just didn’t make sense that he would just leave Lucy and the others out of nowhere, and go immediately to Ultear, felt like there was no time to process what happened. Just feels like the entire story before that was initially focused on Naruto re-connecting with the world, him not being a loner and making connections for once after being alone for years. Especially since right before when they were on the ship, he had decided he wasn’t gonna leave at the end of the year. Just feels weird that you built him up to do that, then just abruptly take it out from under with him suddenly leaving especially after that weird event. Then he randomly drops his guard down around Ultear, who he’s been nice to but he was still wary of the entire story, personally just doesn’t make sense to me that he also would go all the way with her, I get that’s he a pervert or whatever, but he’s fundamentally a character who values his bonds with friends, he wouldn’t be the type of person who would just do that with Ultear out of nowhere, one would think it’s someone he’s actually committed to, or at least have a strong connection to some degree. Combine that with him being wary of her, it just doesn’t make sense. The time travel stuff barely made any sense either since it was kinda rushed, didn’t feel descriptive and was confusing to read through. The rushing part especially came back right after when he goes to Master Hades and then immediately beats him within a chapter. Once again felt like there was no time to breathe. Also pretty sure he was just like drunk the entire time too.

I’m saying all this just because this really was definitely one of the best stories I’ve ever read and it feels like a real shame that it collapsed towards the more recent chapters like that (although I do realize that this hasn’t been updated in years), just wish it hadn’t been like that towards the end. I hope you could come back to this story one day and update it again, but at the same time I feel like these recent chapters would need to be reworked majorly. Still I really appreciated the great read though!

The worst thing about fanfiction is the fact that they never end. Obviously it must be understood, this is a hobby not a job. But this is especially sad when the story is good, very good. It is one of the best Naruto x Fairy Tail crossovers.
The plot is entertaining, the characters are excellent. And despite the fact that Naruto is like a god in terms of power, the story does not become boring, it was very successful to focus the plot on the protagonist's personal, moral conflicts and decisions.
And it has been more than a year since its last update, I do not know if it will continue or is in hiatus, but I hope to see new chapters someday.
Excellent work.

still a 'TOOL' huh? i was thinking maybe she loves him by now... maybe soon...

hey this chapter completely proved this naruto is complete hypocrite. think ' did people deserve a chance ro make up for their wrongs?' after chasing sasuke for so long like a fan girl who just wont leave the idol alone. and now he did didnt even think of sasuke not even once...

Que porcaria... História muito mal feita... Lixo!

Translator: Brasil - Português

this story was a bit amazing in the beginning, but it lost it's shine after a while. so much useless drama and nothing really interesting. it's a total crap. shitty crap.

Why's this story named "Wither"? It gives off the feeling of death and the like...

After the scene in the cane with black zetsu thus story seemed entirely different. It's like I'm not even reading the same story. Naruto's moral compass is all over the place and everything feels so rushed.

It doesn't feel like he's going to end up with Ultear. I mean, unless something drastic changes. It would seem kind of cheap if it was like they suddenly just had all these feelings. I'm kind of wanting Lucy to hunt him down and drag his ass home.

It feels like Naruto will end up with Lucy. I can just see the moment in my head. All of his first kisses so far have been described differently. I'd wager the girl he ends up with would have a more dramatic reaction.

You still have a lot of cards to play and only one more dark guild to contend with. I'm wondering where black zetsu is, if he's perhaps with Tartarus. I'll have to check out some of your other work. I hope you might enjoy some of mine.

Makarov nodded, "Yes, but it's nice to see friends in the flesh. How long are you going to stick around?"

"I guess, but not too long I think," Naruto said.

This is a exert from your story. I had several to choose from and wanted to show you a bad habit you have, constructively. Someone asks or state two separate things and you blend the answer in one sentence without clear separation. It is very confusing for the reader.

Also, why is your Naruto so much like Shikamaru? I mean, he's no Rock Lee, but Naruto was never this blah about life. Sure, if this was his older self in Boruto maybe, but even then he'd be more responsible. I understand he misses home, but this is what's become of him? Personally it just makes him a disappointment. It's like he's lost that special something, ya know?

I'm interested in the story and like how you're doing things differently, but Naruto is making things a bit dry. His whole outlook just seems blah.

geez I get that this is your story and you can do whatever you want to do with it. But after being repeatedly reminded that this is a strict Naruto x Lucy pairing, I feel kinda cheated now that you brought Ultear to the mix.
Don't get me wrong this is a great story but this particular pairing was the main reason why I started reading it in the first place

oookay.I take back what I said about your english being good. Somehow it got worse with so many grammatical and structural mistakes. Even though it seems like an enjoyable story I cant get through it with the litany of mistakes. At least its not the worst.

Okay I actually like this story and it does seem that your English is good. Because there are periods with little to no mistakes and then there would be sentences which would make no sense; broken and wrongly worded. Just proof read your stuff or get someone to beta. I know you can't be perfect when writing but only if such mistakes are infrequent do you not notice them as much.