This would be such a good full story. I love it!

I dont know why this story has so little attention. Love the vignette style! Very intriguing

I really want Bella to get her revenge. I would love for Edward to die knowing he killed the light in her eyes.

Wow, riveting POV from Edward.

Amnesia? Witsec? How these stars might cross and be righted is calling a marker and a major miracle on both sides
R

Sooo... she was taken. Her family was arrested. Apparently, she was not incriminated, but was used to get her family. She must have figured out that her fiancé was not who he seemed. I assume you are being vague for a purpose. It will get better, won't it?
Judy

Ugh, it sucks. He had to know this was coming, though.

i like this story.

Is Bella a member of a mob? Is Edward an agent? No questions have been answered. Nothing has been explained. Is this going to continue like this or do I have a hope that it will begin to make sense?
Judy

Oh, no. He was so wrong from the beginning. And then he never had the opportunity to explain.

Oh officer of the law, are you as light as you pretend or as dark as what you purport to purge from society?
R

How is he going to fix things now?

A strange, dark tale. Can he destroy her family and protect her from the repercussions?
Judy

I like this so far, but it seems like the chapters are all one long prologue. Maybe the dialogue is coming soon?

I have to admit I couldn't remember what this was when I saw the update, so I re- read it. It really is excellent writing.