Pretty good. Bit corny. But I’ve seen worse

This was a great, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. You did a great job on it congrats. Keep up the great work

I'm gonna be honest. The whole "if i don't get reviews it will take longer to update" thing, is a bitch move.

There are people, myself included, that write and post for a year and the story barely gets any attention. The difference between you and us, we don't play the bitch card.

This story had the potential to be great, it's juat unfortunately filled with constant grammatical errors and you listened to the reviews way to fucking much.

I'll tell you what i tell everyone what i think about harems, 3 to 4 girls max. Anything more is just pointless.

Where's Pervy sage's ghost when you need him? He needs to possess some random jackass and make naruto a shit ton of money.

To bad Pervy sage couldn't be revived, the books would be cash cows

T_T I'M CRYING TEARS FILLED WITH MY YOUTHFULNESS, YOSH! Yeah fuck that line, stilled cried a little bit!

Damn straight you TRASH, FINISH HER!

How about you edit your stuff so you don't MISLEAD people into reading this trash? Why is it trash and misleading? The summary implied he was only going to be with woman, but you began asking for feedback and things you should do. YOU dictate your story, NOT us.

So, you got and took the path of listening to reviews regarding pairings and decided to go harem... Despite that, I then expected MK characters and POSSIBLY Ino after how she acted since you wanted to go harem... I didn't like it, but I could accept it... But...

I knew from how you listened to reviews that this would go a certain way, a bad way, so I skipped ahead. Hinata bashing, cheating, etc, terrible stuff, yet she somehow ends up with Naruto as well? What was the point of all this, then? All the "hurt", a hurt where a significant amount that came from her actions. Absolutely one of the worst decisions I've read in a fanfic and what really ruined this for me... I'm thankful for my foresight in skipping ahead when I felt my instincts call.

Then you added Sakura, Hinata, and even Tsunade to an already large enough harem. For those of you that are reading this, don't waste your time, especially if you expected the romance to just be with MK characters. The author doesn't write terribly and it could've been fun... If he didn't listen so much to reviews. It's the downfall of so many nice stories on here... Like this was turning out to be at the start.

Good luck. You have potential to be a good writer as it's impressive you finished this... Just stop listening to reviews so much, especially regarding pairings... and if you don't, at least set a limit. 3, 5 MAX. Unless you have A LOT of experience, large harems just can't be written well if you want actual romance in your fic... That is, unless it's mostly smut or fluff with barely any action.

You are your own master, not your readers. If your story is a road, we can help polish and make it look nice, but you're the one who dictates where it leads. After all, it's YOURS, not ours.

Yep your story is fucking trash

Eats his face and:

Naruto and everyone else saw exactly what happened during the fatality. Naruto just looked at Mileena and said, "SSweeeeeeeet…..ah man, now 'THAT'S more like it

**** Nah I'm out.

Meh shouldve said it last chapter. The interactions were quite off with Ino and Tsunade. The bit with Ino suddenly being physically overwhelmed was weird too.

It already affected her mind and made her weary which she shouldve come out feeling the same. Nothing physical happened to her and there shouldnt be some huge hit from it physically as if it were some time stop story where everything you do to the person frozen in time suddenly hits them all in an instant.

Is this creepy cheekless Mileena with the fangs or normal faced Mileena?

Hinata and kiba... yeaaaah fuck that shit.

Yeah fuck you, Hinata you bitch. Karma is a bitch, man. A wise man once said, “You get what your fucking deserve”!

im leaning more towards the mortal kombat 11 fanfic as i looked around on fanfiction and there isn't really many stories with a crossover of the two and most of the ones that are have not been updated in a while. that being said i loved the story and would like to see more sometime.

I like to choice the point number 1