| Reviews for Ultimate Hero |
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Harmonious.Dream chapter 6 . 8/6 pls update, i kind of want to see want's next. |
NazgulBelserion chapter 6 . 7/26 This story is so cool and well written whyyyyyyy is there no more I fkin Love Izuru |
neos5051 chapter 6 . 2/4 you going to continue this fanfic? |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/16/2019 I am already liking this |
KingAllen chapter 6 . 10/13/2019 Is he have all quirk, considering The Kamukura Izuru have all talent. Also about the Multiple Izuru thing can you not do it it will make Deku not special or if you still want to do it you have to make that Deku is the only success experiment and all the other beside him is imperfect so it can set the difference between him and the other. Also can you consider make All might make Izuru succesor it will be funny the one who defeat AFO is his own creation. |
Yveltios chapter 1 . 10/6/2019 This story was quite interesting to read. I don't know why you stopped updating, but I will follow this story in case you ever decide to continue this story. |
Kaoskween chapter 1 . 6/26/2019 It’s great. Don’t beat yourself up about it. |
Wicked.A chapter 6 . 3/3/2019 I wonder if the upgraded league of villians has the despair twins in it though somehow I think any Villian group with junko in it would be to op (not taking into acount that junko is a betrayer). So izuru can only use one quirk at a time? how does he compare to canon izuru? if he used only x-ray vision and fought his canon counterpart would he lose? From what I have seen it seems izuru is missing something (somekind of stabilizer quirk? maybe even all for one itself?) to reach his full potential or at least to utilize many if not all his quirks at once and combine them (I mean otherwise he would not be an ultimate lifeform and even somewhat pitiful compared to all for one). Cant wait for the next chapter it would also be Interesting if junko pulled a most tragic, despair inducing event of all time in this world, just to see the mass panic in the sheep that are the general populace in the my hero verse though I guess the story would be to dark if that happened. Cant wait for the next chapter! Good Work! |
kingleo.chuenchom chapter 6 . 12/14/2018 Loved it i hope you update soon |
Monoyoshi chapter 6 . 10/26/2018 I love your story please update soon. |
Gamelover41592 chapter 6 . 7/27/2018 this is an awesome fic hope you haven't abandoned this |
Ctl0ver777 chapter 6 . 7/21/2018 Will "Junko" be in this story? It just wouldn't feel like a proper "Danganronpa" crossover without the "Queen of Despair" herself. Considering shes responsible for the most "Despairing event in human history" in her respective cannon (She did corrupted an entire class of prodigies into terrorists who intern caused a massive social-collapse on a global-scale), she would likely be a villein on the threat level of "All for One" If not more so. |
Waffenmia chapter 6 . 7/9/2018 I like it. |
xaldreca chapter 2 . 6/26/2018 Ok, I've read to the end of chapter 2 and I have a few comments. I figured that I should write them down before I forget. 1. This is an engaging and interesting story. One that I've enjoyed up to this point, so even though I'm going to be pointing out flaws, I have have a good time. 2. It feels like you've missed words or misspelled them very often throughout these two chapters I've gone through. These are usually at the beginning of a sentence and are words like if and as. These don't make your sentences unreadable, but it can take a bit to understand at times. However, this is a very fixable thing. If you don't have one, I would recommend getting a beta reader, but reading your work out loud and text correctors should help as well. 3. I don't understand why you felt the need to tell us the names of the heroes. It didn't come up later, and just felt awkward. I would recommend just leaving out or mentioning it in an author's note. On a similar note, that fourth wall break/ In chapter author's note was unnecessary, distracting, and weird. It didn't really have a place in the chapter other than to give meta-information. Even if you were going to leave the names in the chapter, that should have been moved to an end of chapter author's note. 4. Please don't write in all caps. It doesnt look good to read, and it delivers a different tone than I think you're going for. When I read all caps, I see it as someone screaming as loud as they can, but thats not how you use it most of the time. I'll use this chapter to demonstrate, as I believe you used it both well and poorly here. So, just like last chapter, you used all caps to represent All Might's voice in his hero form. This is what I'm considering to be a poor use of all caps. I'm of the belief that you use it to show how loud he is, but it gives the impression of him screaming at all times. However, it's clear that he isn't from your description, which makes this a weird juxtaposition. In my opinion, a better solution would be to have him speak in bold text, like in your author's notes. This would help show is presense without making it seem like he's shouting all the time. This is further contrasted by what I believe is a good example of all caps. This being the civilians that shout out at All Might when they see him. This is very clearly meant to show what I said all caps are used for, people shouting as loud as they can. While this is used for good effect here, as it shows how loud they are when the all caps separates itself from its surrounding text, it is lessened by the words of All Might, which are already in all caps. This also implies that you are using all caps to make it seem like All Might is screaming, when you use it as an indicator of his hero form rather than just volume. As I've said, this could be solved by giving All Might bold text instead of all caps, but that's ultimately up to you. So, that's all I have to say so far. I hope this helps. |
Greer123 chapter 6 . 6/24/2018 You did a great job writting this story and I hope you are doing well. |