It was okay till the end, then it was just false ending after false ending to try and seem deeper then the story really is. All that ending acomplished was to make me regret reading till then. And the story was flawed from the start as the character are established developing powers in their early teens but somehow do not get properly trained till after highschool which makes no sense. I wanted to like this but it was made impossible too many inconsistancies and jumping around to be coherent, read like a drunken Dean Koontz on mescaline. I liked that Anna starts to belive in herself down the line but not the wasted time and effort in trying to make us believe she would not trust Elsa enough to disclose her true potential to her and just talk things out together, especially considering her powers. Good luck with your future endeavors and best wishes.

Cool

The first thing that would happen is that a teacher would show them around the school. Then they would be given a bedroom and be sharing the same bed. They would go to the gym and meet the gym teacher and show off their powers. Then they go to their other classes. Then go to their bedroom.

You did get some things wrong. Sky High has nothing to do with the government. There wouldn't be a cover-up. Failure would not mean going to another school. Xavier's school would exist since they're likely in the same universe. There would also be Anti-heroes. So someone like Dark Elsa Snow could become an Anti-hero.

uggh. Everytime i click my phone back on i have to find where i left off, which is more annoying than it might sound. Honestly, the writing just isnt good enough to make me want to put up with that.

It being a single chapter is definitely detrimental to the reading experience and there are a few English problems but I’m guessing you don’t write for the sake of writing so who cares.

I believe you did what you set out to do— good (if short) scenes tied together by a competent story. It sounds sterile and meaningless, but I liked this.

You really should split the chapters up again though.

All I have to say is that the ending of that story was so mixed up and all over the place that it made no sense to me and I feel like it you could have made it far clearer and it kind of ruined the story for me, but that’s just me I’m sure someone liked it

So amazing! I spend all morning and half afternoon reading it, this is the kind of dark fanfics I like. I would had been happy if Elsa really let her sleeping fifty years or not. That would be like Elsa's happy end. And it turned out really good, with everyone's happy end. Thx for your hard work!

Very nice, even when compressed into one chapter. The ending is interesting and I liked what happened.

You changed the story from being a thirteen chapter to one. Making it difficult to read and find where you left off. Everyone mentioning the ending it's like you decided one outcome and added on the alternate ending. This made the story so confusing.

What the fuck...

I don't know what the qualms are; I loved this. Honestly sad it's over, but I'm glad you concluded instead of abandoning it :)
Keep writing

This was a bit confusing. Maybe cuz you write like poetry and chemistry essay like, I like it but english is not my first language so i get distracted by the wording. Great fic by the way.

Would just like to say thank you for writing such a wonderful fic! Ended up re-reading it all upon seeing this update cos it's just so good

Wait, what?