Really good story I can't wait until you release book 2 if that happened but anyway keep up the good work

Sirius was blasted fro the tapestry not disowned

The potter family may not have been a ancient house but it was still a noble house james would t need to stay as a auror cause the family already ha as fortune and he’d be expected to invest their money and should already have a enterprise or two. Though I’m really not liking two things. One lily and snape having this thing that fact that she blushed at him god help me. I think a more brother sister bond would have fit more I just hope this doesn’t get to dramatic and out of proportion. Also I think your overestimating a Aruror’s work load even if he’s a captain it’s only time consuming during wartime but they are in peace time.

Abused isn’t the right word I’d say bullied now if his teachers are beating him then it’s abuse.

One thing I hope you take into consideration is the magical worlds medical field. It’s completely advanced grossly so. You only need a simple spell to heal any bone injury and there is a vast amount of potions that can cure any diseases or ailment no matter how are magical people get them. I highly doubt they can’t fix nerve damage. Though nerve damage would affect ones ability to give birth. Unless it heightens her sense of pain or prevents her brain from providing its own pain killers then I’d understand.

From the Sirius introduction in the nursery, I can say that it’s alright but doesn’t really capture his character. He didn’t believe in good and evil being separate. For starters they didn’t have much of any death eaters until Karkorff squealed to the court. But I don’t think Sirius would just condemn snape after dumbledore called him his spy. Also Sirius doesn’t really need work he is the only living heir for the status of lord black which means he’d have a multitude of business to run on a fairly steady flow of cash.

Books 2 ?

Sorry, but this is ridiculously contrived. Harry going to a school that is hundreds of kilometers from where he lives? How does that make any sense? And it's not as if the Dursleys bothered to conceal their hatred of the Potter, so why would Lily think that it would be a good idea for him to visit the same school as Dudley.

Sounds like Lily would be a good candidate for a cesarean delivery.

Excellent. Glad to see a woke writer.

One question - why would they only know she was barren if the healer was muggle-born? Other than that, it’s very interesting, well written, and there aren’t many mistakes - I won’t say there are none, but I didn’t notice any.

Holy crap! Are you able to go even a few sentences without writing "the Potter child" or derivation of that? It just shows what a terrible writer you are.

The 1st chapter was decent and had a lot of potential, but everything after that didn't make any sense what so ever. Okay so Lily wants her son to go to a Muggle school, that is believable. Her not preparing him at all for it does not make sense. Her letting her only son get bullied without doing anything for two years make no sense either! Oh she talked to her sister once and that's it?! She didn't talk to the school at all about the lack of supervision that has led to her son being bullied? This is a woman that is known for having a short fuse and you have her do NOTHING? What an idiot! Oh she has no problem being a bitch to her husband though.

This is a terrible story that no one should read. I will do my best to keep others from reading it when I see it recommended. Please consider taking up a new hobby, preferably something that nobody else might have the misfortune of one day seeing.

this is pretty good!

Hum... The Potters are bad parents. James is not present and Lily doesn't act to protect Harry from the Dursleys. And a Harry that doesn't like Quidditich. I don't like it.

Loved the book! Are you going to write a sequel?