Thank you. You beautiful b st #d. I’m crying tear of joy. Sooo much joy.

Why are people getting so upset over this? The guy clearly says this story is not his.. Unless he is getting paid for it then it's a problem...

This Cynosarges guy is so annoying,I hate this kind of person

Finally some use it right,it should be "xxx'x'xxx" rather than "xxx"x"xxx",I'm so glad.

Dude, I mean,is Bai Hu the one I'm thinking about, I mean, the one from Chinese fairy tales? cuz I'm a Chinese and I find it familiar. We often say "dragon(qinglong) in the east, white tiger(baihu) in the west, rosefinch(zhuque) in the south, tortoise(xuanwu) in the north",and also "gou狗) is the phonetic transcription of dog in chinese.

Adam x Jaune, plz

lol ok

Mmm I not sure if it's what I'm smoking or the fact that I'm reading this at 4am but I'm 90% sure that at the end the same paragraphs are double same words same attacks but maybe I'm imaginating things? I even double checked it it was like a time attack like a cycle or a buckle but I belive there was a mistake

the best part of this story is the White Fabg parts

oh I get it. Dreary Midnight and Lenore. "Quoth the Raven"

Yaknow, After rereading this (story and chapter) several dozen times, I can safely say I enjoy the story between Jaune, the White Fang, and Jian Bing more. The whole 'tale of demons and gods' [ ;) ] started scaling things up way too quickly and actually approached the DBZ probelm where every enemy starts getting bigger and badder and things went from a little less gray to more black and white. After reading the battle scene at the end and reading up on his teasers or whatever they're called, I'm not sure that the world itself could scale to match Jaune and his spiritual nemesis. Meanwhile with the bit with Jian Bing and the White Fang, felt like each fight actually had potential to be fatal, where he had to bluff his way out of situations, where the world reacted to his actions as Jian Bing. *To explain myself real quickly, the "dbz problem" is a problem where attacks, enemies, and powers start scaling up to such a degree that the enemy always has to be significantly stronger than the protagonist for there to be tension and every other skirmish has no meaning because both the protagonist and the antagonist are so overly powerful.

I loved this chapter
Makes no sense though... Let's just casually talk for 10 minutes easily while everyone dies :)... I mean really?! Read the reality of the scene, make it intense and non-stop stressful with no breathing room and twists in the story every few minutes. That is what should be happening.

I hate how much effort was put into this, how good it is, how much I enjoyed reading it until at the end I realise it's all utter bull and could have actually made sense and been a hundred times more epic easily. After all, this sequence of events is really really bloody awesome but just sucks when it comes to realistic reactions and problems arising from the characters in play

Thanks for the read!
- Vort

The only thing really keeping me going in this is that Raven ain't a bad person and all that info can be used well by her.
Also that Jaune can fix stuff up with Weiss later in Beacon, COME ON ALREADY I WANT TO SEE THAT TEAM DEVELOPMENT!

xD
- Vort

Major plot holes in this because he could easily use his power in a thousand ways to fix this situation.
Hate this chapter because he could have done 3 different easily done and thought of things to stop any of this from getting to the point it did.

Thanks for the read!
- Vort

I enjoy the lore dumps and information about the ability a lot. However in recent chapters I'm getting sick and tired of them. Mainly because they add unnecessary explanations that could be sumed up by 1 or 2 words saying, "I'll go to the tourdenment". I mean really, you could even just skip to the bloody thing instead of having a long winded unnessary debate an out this stuff. Even the debate has nothing going for it either, with no character moments or development to progress them or show us stuff about them at all.
All in all, I hated the explanations in this chapter as they added nothing to the story except make it boring. I'm also looking forward to skipping these info dumps in future to save myself wasting time on useless, unneeded and highly boring paragraphs of nothing at all...

God I hate when writers make bland explainations for page after page and don't realise that they need to make it more intriguing or important to keep people hooked. Sadly, this writer is really good at explainations but seems to have fallen short on important ones and made this chapter boring.
Loved the past chapters explanations (although they could be cut down a bit),

- Vort