huh? i'm more confused than i was earlier when my friend called and said... never mind. but what's going on?

That was GREAT!

i'm confused with the POV. I assume it's Syd. Ok so who is 'he' then i thought it was vaughn but then the end in the letter to Sark. I'm confused!

Ooooh, I love your story! The twist at the end was great! With Sark, taking down the CIA, committing suicide. It was original. Thank you for breaking away from the traditional Sydney and Vaughn taking down SD-6 and forever living in peace and love together.

WHAT? Ok way wasnt expecting that? I mean with the Hockey and stuff...totally thought it was Vaughn not SARK! SARK! wow! But other than the way weird ending that BLEW MY MIND I liked it... and that says a lot cuz i am the biggest S/V shipper ALIVE...but you did a fabulous job writing the emotions and everything!

Man, I'm a chump. You totally got me. :D Very cool story. Couple notes of constructive criticism...

When they're meeting in the building and kiss for the first time, and you mention acid several times, I uh... couldn't figure out if you were speaking literally. I'm like, "What, does he have battery acid on his fingers? Or is this all figurative?" :D If it's a metaphor (which I should hope it is!) you might want to mix it up instead of using acid several times. Toss in some other burny sensations or something.

Also, on the second to last paragraph, it gets a little hard to follow which "he" we're talking about... Sark? Vaughn? I know you're trying to keep your surprise for the next paragraph, but you might want to try rewriting both paragraphs or just revealing yourself a paragraph earlier. I almost feel like I'm missing something important because I'm not sure who you're talking about where.