Great storyline. Some chapters were tougher than others to read but all in all I very much enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it.

Very good so far!

Gapes horrified/elated at elevator man and his sequel teasing!

I'm exhausted !

*stares gaping in horror* *tried to formulate words* *fails utterly* * sobs forever*

"I'm going to need you to repeat that, Miss Swan. Where is my brother?" Worst moment of his life, worst moment of her life. Worst moment of MY life

And here we goooooo

"You've been shot." Thank you captain obvious! Yeah so that one hurt. Because as blatantly obvious it is to the rest of us what he is doing there was just enough of a shred of truth in it to hurt. He IS the one that's trained for this and her not trusting him really could get them both killed.

I'm sure it's just the ... pizza delivery guy?

And now John's little brother is in the same danger :'( *sobs forever* - this is going to be a common theme I think...

I love seeing killian annoyed by the same exact kinds of things he would totally say to his brother coming from emma :P And Liam trying to scare Emma off and finally just begging her to look after his brother. *sobs forever* It's just the kind of thing Emma likely needed to start seeing Killian as a person rather than just someone who might or might not help her get to Michael

I do, admittedly find Emma somewhat obnoxious here. Not that she's out of character, of course, it's just ... come on sweetheart he's trained for this!

Ugh, have I mentioned to you lately how much I adore Liam jones. I could read 400 chapters of Liam jones being exasperated with his little brother!

This is excellently done!

I literally can't stop reading this story!
It's so amazingly good!

Great story but um I have a request for a story can you do one when there in never land I don't know what the story line could be but can it just be one about when there in never land

aww! swoon! I loved this story so much!